First November Entry

[mullvaney]

This is very rough; I finished writing it 30 seconds before the submission deadline. Not an excuse, just sain

Comments

[desert_rose]

Hi! I'm one of your editors for this week

[mullvaney]

Thank you so much for the edit and the encouragement! This has not happened to me, thank goodness, because sometimes my husband is the only person in my corner. I wrote this on a rather bad day at work, and my imagination tends to present me with frightening things on bad days (because the above scenario is my second worst nightmare, the first being the death of my daughter).

*hugs* I hope things turn out for the best with you and your husband, and I'm truly sorry if my story upset you.

[wierdauntie]

Hideous blindside! BUt you obviously know your wine...

[mullvaney]

Thank you! I truly, truly love wine, and so I've worked hard to learn about it. The rest of the story is just one of my nightmares ....

[dioscorea]

Hello, I'm your other editor :)

The only things I noticed were very, very minor. There were just a few places where there was a comma splice or a word that needed changing, but since it's all stuff that usually would get caught during an edit I know it's not a reflection of your writing ability.

You did a great job with the flow of the dialogue, and I really liked the amount of detail you included in the piece. It really makes the reader feel like they're sitting at a nearby table, witnessing the unfortunate scene. Great work!

[mullvaney]

Thanks for the edit and the compliments!