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Early Morning Departures ||

Sep 13, 2008 00:25

Title: Early Morning Departures
Author: mm29
Rating: 18 for language
Pairing: belldom
Disclaimer: I own zilch.
*Warning:*: lots of language : ) Ye be warn.
Notes: Thank you so much to everyone for the lovely words XD

( ain't he a bastard... )

muse, emd, belldom, angst

Comments 29

dolce_piccante September 12 2008, 19:17:27 UTC

oooh your dom is such a bastard! god, he's so conflicted and mean and poor matt...ugh!...i hope dom gets put in his place soon...man, you wrote with such a masculine, dominant feeling...very impressive...can't wait to see what's next! some bits that really stood out to me:

The only thing I wanted from you was that frantic, rough, animalistic sex with that undertone of passion and need you would offer me. So I played along because I’m greedy and, yes, a bastard. I called your name and held you tight and whispered sweet nothings in your ear and then had my way with you and left before you could want anything else.....I stopped calling it love making, but instead sex and then eventually ‘let’s fuck’ and even that couldn’t throw you. Secretly, I think you liked it. Liked how rough and dominating I was becoming rather than that tender, sweet man I had once been with you.ugh, that images...so hot...but then you flip it and make it so cruel on dom's part...i love how you do that....how you take moments that are beautiful or hot but then ( ... )

musclemuseum29 September 13 2008, 01:10:49 UTC

Naw! Thanks lov :) -the end of your comment made me deliriously happy-
I liked those two bits too, I wanted to show that Dom could both be a bastard and loving- he's just a confused little boy lol.
And I can't help it with Dom, I look at him and think...nup, you're a bastard underneath that beautiful innocent face.
Thanks babe

xanium September 13 2008, 07:23:45 UTC

GAH Dom's such a douchebag!! This was lovely, really can't wait to see where this ends up. So much intense emotion in the dialogue!!

Keep it up hon, and the mistake factor was v low so no need to apologise ;P Although if you ever need a beta, I'd be happy to help you out! XD

musclemuseum29 September 13 2008, 13:17:07 UTC

Thanks babe :) And I enjoyed writing the dialogue- bastard Dom's kind of fun to write XD
And, if you still want, I will be taking you up on that beta offer
*huggles and shrooms*

xanium September 14 2008, 13:14:23 UTC

No worries :)

Sure!! My email is: wicked_grrl909@hotmail.com (lol its such an old address, please don't laugh!! XD)
Just send your fics there and I'll beta them!! :D

exiled_girl September 13 2008, 09:32:44 UTC

Oooh morning fiction. ;p

After this Matt needs to get down on business. You have gone far enough Dom. He needs to see who is in control, that little drama queen!

musclemuseum29 September 13 2008, 13:19:33 UTC

Heh, morning fic's the best -though I keep reading it and thus become late for school and somehow I think the excuse 'I was reading about Matt screwing Dom senseless' is going to pass as reasonable.*sigh, if only*

And Dom will get what's coming to him, eventually- there's still a bit more bastard in him to unleash. Thanks for the comment lov *hugs*

stefanyeah September 13 2008, 10:56:15 UTC

OH GOD.
THAT BASTARD
*gets-pitchfork-and-chases*

musclemuseum29 September 13 2008, 13:22:25 UTC

LOL. Yeah, that pretty much sums up the whole chapter :P And when you're chasing Dom down, I don't care what you do to that child (spank him till he screams if you want XD), but bring him back at least a little whole, I still need him :P
Cheers love *hugs and tosses fairy dust (everyone needs some in thier life :) )*

dolce_piccante September 14 2008, 05:28:24 UTC

sorry to butt in but:

I don't care what you do to that child (spank him till he screams if you want XD)

guh!

stefanyeah September 17 2008, 12:30:07 UTC

Spanking? With a pitchfork?
A pitchwork is an instrument for pwoppa hardcore poking.
But I will leave some body parts unpoked for you.

Aaawwww. *dances-in-fairy-dust*

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semi_shadowed September 13 2008, 16:34:02 UTC

But...but...poor Matteh!! Dom's being such a knob in this, a right bastard...I love it though, and I really can't wait to see what Matt's gonna do next- he has to stand up to Dom! I can't stop going 'awww' :( lol xx

musclemuseum29 September 14 2008, 00:50:25 UTC

Lol,naw cheers lov :) And yes, Dom will get whats coming to him, but there's still just a little more bastard ( and sex ;) )in him until Matt realises Dom isn't worth it - honestly, he's a little daft that one :P
Oh yea, and I'm glad my comment made your day for Heat Lightning, I was so enraptured with it, it deserved it bella. *hugs and crackers...*