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In Your Darkest Hour - Harry/Luna - 4/4

May 03, 2006 21:50

Title: In Your Darkest Hour (4/4)
Fandom: Harry Potter
Characters: Harry/Luna
Prompt: #8 - Weeks
Word Count: 3340
Rating: PG/PG-13
Summary: Death is common during the second war, but sometimes it hits closer to home than imagined.

( For a moment, Harry wondered if this would be the way Ron would die. Not by some courageous act in the middle of battle but by choking on a turkey and cheese sandwich after hearing that his best mate had kissed a girl. )

Comments 23

bk03 May 4 2006, 02:10:09 UTC

Very nice. I thought you did a good job with the whole thing. I think when it comes to things like girls, Harry does need to be smacked in the face with the truth. I liked how you handled the Harry/Luna relationship and how you let it build. The payoff in this part was good. I can see Luna pulling away, like she did after the first kiss, thinking it was just a moment but when Harry confesses his feelings to her, she as no problem staying. Hope you write something else.

_fullofgrace May 6 2006, 00:55:43 UTC

Thank you! I'm very glad to hear the ending was pulled off well. My muse is so use to one-shots that wrapping up longer pieces tend to intimidate her. Thanks again for the feedback on all these chapters! :)

1grl_revolution May 4 2006, 03:16:53 UTC

Awwwww! Yay!

Well done, as always. :) I like how you portray Hermione and how Harry wants to thump her with one of her own books. That made me giggle. *g*

_fullofgrace May 6 2006, 00:56:09 UTC

Glad I can amuse! :)

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_fullofgrace May 6 2006, 00:57:01 UTC

Thank you! It was actually a lot of fun writing the trio interacting like that. :)

madderbrad May 4 2006, 07:00:34 UTC

Slight typo - "Department of Ministry"?

Very pleasant read. I like Hermione's theory as to why Luna seemed to be fixated on Ron back in OotP (was there any of that in HBP? I think a couple of times Ron said things like "she's growing on me"), that was clever.

Little bit disappointed in Luna's preparing to leave Harry, had he not spoken up. She obviously liked him and was prepared to stay if asked, so, given he'd made the first move with the first kiss, why do the "I'm leaving" act? Did she seriously think it was his hormones speaking, that he didn't really like *her*? But, if she liked him already, why would she believe that of Harry?

Thanks for the story!

_fullofgrace May 6 2006, 00:58:59 UTC

Typo fixed. Thanks for the headsup!

I don't know if I'd call Luna's leaving an act, per se, but I can totally see where you're coming from.

Thanks, as always, for the feedback! I totally appreciate it.

wooooooo!!!!! daydreamrachey May 4 2006, 17:33:56 UTC

two days in a row my favorite HarryLuna fanfics are updated with their last chapter. I LOVE YOU!!! hahaha you're a genius, Tonya, you really are. you are like a goddess in the H/L realm. that was awesome. *SIGH* i'm just so giddy right now i feel like jumping up and down! in fact, i think i will! wheeeeeeeee!

sorry, got a little too hyper there. but that's how your fics make me feel! awesome! you rock. go Tonya. woooohooo

hey do you think you could come and review some of my harryluna fics on fanfiction.net? my pen name is LuvPotionNo9

if you do a ff.net author search for it, don't put the 9, or else it wont work :P

much love

Rachel

Re: wooooooo!!!!! _fullofgrace May 6 2006, 00:59:33 UTC

Awwww, thank you so much! I will definitely check out your work when I get back in town!