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[museme87]

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Just A Girl [PG-13] (1/2)

[museme87]

It's strange walking down the corridors on rounds and not seeing the sway of Lily's long hair from the corner of his eye. A little part of him misses it-the way it'd get in her face as she rounded on him to tell him off, the way it shifted with her every move. He also misses its familiar weight in his hands, thick strands tangled in his fingers. She'd been growing it out for as long as he can remember, probably for as long as she'd been insulting him-which, honestly, is practically the same thing

Just A Girl [PG-13] (2/3)

[museme87]

In the end, James chooses to act by not acting. This whole thing is rather lost on him. Oh, he's seen girls getting fussed about things like this before-hair or cosmetics or a certain way they wear their clothes on Hogsmeade weekends. One wrong word has them absolutely mental. The problem is that he's never seen Lily act like this. She's bloody unpredictable at the moment, and he's not idiot enough to approach her without a battle plan. Too many years of being on the wrong end of Lily's wand has taught him that much

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

His heart falters a bit at "boyfriend" because they've never qualified what's happening between them. Snogs could just be unqualified snogs. Hand-holding the same. And it's a bit scary even though he's wanted this very thing for the better part of two years. Him, James Potter, Lily Evans' boyfriend.

He moves his hand from her back to her chin and leads her down for a kiss. Lips meet, easy and deep. He pulls her a little closer-fuck McGonagall and her knickers-and feels Lily's hands on his chest. She pulls back a little-stares at him-her question so easy to read in her eyes.

"I like your hair," he reassures, tugging her bunches free.

James runs his fingers through her red tresses-dark in the low light. It feels so light now, and he can imagine how it must feel to be liberated of all that weight of before. A new Lily, then-a beautiful, grown witch ready to face the nightmares of the world outside Hogwarts. And he wants to say, Look at what you've become and I never would have thought you were that girl from the train"Promise?" she

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[gmariam]

That's amazing. You totally owned that prompt, lol. I'm so impressed by how you took so little - a haircut - and turned it into so much. Wonderful story here...although I did sort of want them to continue. ;-)

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

Haha, thanks, Gina! I'm not sure how I managed to get this much out of a hair cut either. And I was going to continue on, but I thought it would be too much for a simple haircut prompt. People might think I was just looking for an excuse to write smut. That being said, I'm totally looking out for a prompt that would lend itself to smut, lol!

Great to see you here as well! We've missed you over at Lily/James Fest!

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[peskywhistpaw]

This is so sweet. I like Lily's insecurity, and how much thinking James actually does about her hair, and how natural you've depicted their relationship and dynamic. And also, gotta love this:

McGonagall. McGonagall in her knickers. McGonagall in her knickers on Filch's desk… Alright, that's a bit much, but it's working.

XD

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

Thanks so much! I can't think of many thing worse than McGonagall in her knickers on Filch's desk. Well, except for maybe Slughorn in McGonagall's knickers on Filch's desk, lol! XD That might make James sick up though, and Lily would still probably be mad at him.

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[firstbreaths]

I love James here -- so earnest in his attempts to get it right, and how much thought he puts into something that should be so simple. ♥

I'm also dying at James imagining McGonagall on Filch's desk here, and as much as I would have loved smut -- I'm kind of glad it all died down here before his thoughts got any more elaborate, because yikes. Pass me the bleach.

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

Hahaha, well if it would have continued, I would have stopped with the horrid visuals. James was at the point of throwing all caution to the wind anyway. He's only human after all. :) Thanks for reading!

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[starry_laa]

This is wonderful! I don't think I've read a fic where Lily has short hair, and I loved the idea of it here! And I love how the haircut was just a side part of this story. I loved James and Lily together here and Lily admitting her insecurities to James. Lovely! ♥ Thanks for doing this prompt!

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

I'm glad you liked it! I've loved the idea of a short haired Lily for sometime now. I like her to have short hair when she was around thirteen or fourteen, but she could have easily cut her hair short before joining the Order. Seems a bit more practical for battling Death Eaters. :)

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[marthemaria]

This was really cute! I love how the poor guy tries to do everything right and accidentally screws up in the process. I also love the reflection on the changing hairstyle and changing Lily.

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

Thanks for reading! I've always imagined James as a bloke with the best of intentions that somehow just don't always come to fruition like he plans, lol.

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[heliconian_julz]

Ohmygoodness this is great! What a fab take on the prompt xD And like Gina, I was hoping they'd go further :P

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[museme87]

Thank you! If I find the right prompt, I promise to leave this fest with some sort of R/NC-17 drabble. :)

Re: Just A Girl [PG-13] (3/3)

[liebedance]

Well, you must know that I adore this piece. Really and truly. You can do amazing things with prompts... the stuff your mind comes up with astounds me sometimes. I adored the first bit of dialogue/where Lily thinks that James doesn't like her hair. Laugh every time. Why are you so amazing, bb?