Fic: Together to the End (504, Dean/Castiel)

[mushishi7]

Title: Together to the End
Pairing: Dean/Castiel
Rating: R
Word: ~2500
Summary: Dean and Castiel talked seriously about what happened and what's going to happen.
Spoilers: 5.04
Warning: Just man-man kiss
Notes: There's too much angst in 504 and most of the 504 slashes. I need to fix it in my brain so that I can live through the next week... It was cross-

Comments

[entangled_now]

Considering English isn't your first language this is really good. The whole story flows out, you can feel what the characters are feeling, why they're doing what they're doing, and the end aches just a little bit. Dean's desperate need to change something. This episode was so broken and I think everyone needed to get out something for it.

"But I didn't ask you because I didn't want you to be Michael's vessel. Even if we cast Lucifer to hell that way, there'll be no you anymore. It's more unacceptable than being abandoned by my brethren." Castiel lowers his head, as if recalling the distress.

I loved this part, beautiful and honest.

[mushishi7]

Wow, i didn't expect a comment this fast. Thank u so much!:) I actually have a question about the tense of verbs. Since the story is going on, I think I should use the present tense, but it's weird to use present tense all the time. Or shall I use the past tense all the time? See, it's a big problem when i've never taken any english writing class.:(

[entangled_now]

I like reading things! I just have trouble keeping up with my flist sometimes.

I use both tenses, present tense more often. But, to be honest, a lot of people have trouble with tenses. I think you did a brilliant job of present tense, you've only slipped in a few places. I read it though again and your sentence construction is really good, better than some I've seen who write in their own language. I think it only gets a little confusing two or three times in the whole story.

[mushishi7]

Thank u! I guess I just need to read more and practice more to get used to it. In my language we don't use clauses, so I had some good time struggling with the sentence structure.:) Thank u again!