The Sunlit Flower Prologue

[must_fear_harpy]

The Sunlit Flower Prologue
Warnings: not much. Some mentions of gore.

This is the intro for a story I'm working on. I'd really like to know what you think. Constructive criticism is appreciated.

Comments

[mommypenguin03]

This was excellent. I was looking forward to reading some of your original work and you did not disappoint!

[ext_433351]

I feel bad. I really wanted to offer some constructive criticism, but I've read it a couple times, and I have nothing. The imagery is outstanding, and I have no trouble picturing things as they happen. So far, Jon seems relatable and believable, and the story itself is interesting. I'm curious to hear more and see what happens next.

[lilyantigone]

Love it! Tried to think of constructive criticism, but nothing really stood out as needing to be changed.