The Bells - A Partial Story by Yours Truly - Please Forgive Any Bad Punctuation

[myaxe]

The frigid northern wind lunged through the crack in the heavy cathedral doors drawing Nancy out into its arctic embrace. Nancy wrapped her scarf around her neck as she stepped into the blustery evening. Her hands sought the smooth, buttery leather of her favorite gloves as she crossed to the railing and began climbing down to street level.

Comments

You are so goddamned great..

[jasonanonymous]

I love your stories - they're the best!

~Jason

Not so sure about the "great" part, but ...

[myaxe]

Thank you.

I'm not the only reader...

[jasonanonymous]

http://www.livejournal.com/users/recycling/82614.html?thread=1688758#t1688758

See?

~Jason

Re: I'm not the only reader...

[myaxe]

That's not exactly what I said, luv. I only stated that I didn't want to post it for the same reason I don't like singing at a karaoke bar. It would hurt my feelings if no one liked it or, worse yet, if everyone hissed and booed!

But, I posted it at your insistence and ... we'll see.

Hollie

[moxiebramble]

I like it, and I apologize for not commenting the first time I read it. Something must have distracted me.

Really clear imagery, I could imagine myself there. :)

[autumn2remember]

eerie... I love the detailed descriptions of everything... His clothing, the sound of his voice, the 'salt flavored hand' and the poetic sound of 'arctic embrace'..

Very very nice!! I do hope you write often, you have a gift for painting a picture, and including all the senses. Now I'm thinking back to my writing, and it's so visual, and maybe a little auditory... There is a whole world of taste, smell, touch... Thanks for reminding me!

But wait - there's more!!!!

[jasonanonymous]

That's only the first of like 4 chapters so far!

I married so well. :)

~Jason

[kenopolis]

Neil Gaiman would Love it!

Very descriptive. I love the bit about the gloves.

It sent chills down my back.