Comments | mymisguided: [LJ Idol] SCI, "The Second Day of the Week"

mymisguided

[LJ Idol] SCI, "The Second Day of the Week"

Mar 08, 2012 21:58

SCI prompt: Open Topic
Author’s Notes: Fiction. Continuation of last week’s Help Wanted ( link). I hope you enjoy!
( He still wasn’t terribly comfortable with the idea that things he never even considered in the realm of possibility not only existed, but were his responsibility to look after. )

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Comments 9

whipchick March 9 2012, 17:01:40 UTC

Still loving this world! And I love the slyness of Derek naming Spike between the last few paragraphs.

I think it's "divots".

If you're interested in a piece of concrit, the rain in the shop is such a great element - so visual and original - and it seems to come and go. Perhaps Derek ends up dealing with it/reacting to it/being in it a bit more? There might be more small, quick details worth putting in?

This is so engaging, and I can't wait to read more!

mymisguided March 12 2012, 04:32:45 UTC

Thanks for the catch! Changed it to divots. =)

I'm glad you're still enjoying it! And thanks for the concrit (I'm always interested! =D), that's definitely something to add when I go back and edit. Thanks for taking the time to give me all this feedback! It's much appreciated. =)

similiesslip March 10 2012, 02:18:01 UTC

Man, now I want to know what happens next! Spike sounds very interesting. I'm glad he didn't eat Derek.

mymisguided March 12 2012, 04:35:58 UTC

Lol, what an ending that would make! xD Derek goes missing...well, guess that answers the question about what it eats! xD;

I have all this built-up headcanon now about Mr. Tuesday's past and what is going to happen next, so hopefully I'll get the chance to write it! =) Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, it's much appreciated!

muchtooarrogant March 11 2012, 02:52:40 UTC

I love both the shop and Mr. Tuesday. Very entertaining.

"The yet was not comforting in the slightest."

Made me grin.

Great job!

Dan

mymisguided March 12 2012, 04:43:01 UTC

Thanks! =D I'm glad you found it entertaining, that's exactly what I'm going for.

Thanks again for taking the time to read and comment, it's much appreciated!

michikatinski March 11 2012, 18:54:47 UTC

Lord. If he had dropped it!

Well done. :)

mymisguided March 12 2012, 04:49:03 UTC

He'd totally blame Spike for it. Or start to question why they seem to keep the breakable stuff on the highest shelves xD

Thanks for commenting, it's much appreciated! =D I'm glad you enjoyed it!

jem0000000 March 12 2012, 23:53:20 UTC

I loved this -- Spike is adorable, and the humor is great. :)