UGH... poetry, heh
er... my posts should be more interesting and less ranting/massive boredom
also, my poetry is terrible, but im just doing it for my own benefit and enjoyment, so yea, just posting them to be crazy and for hunter and buri and other ppl to see them
heh, i wrote a nifty poem, see if you can find it out!
Rattling glass snake
Sway back and forth,
rags of dreadful steel
listen to that quiet purr
Entranced by its soothing song
Forms of stone chiseled
staring onward on the roads that lay ahead
as it journeys toward any direction
anticipate that final place!
(this excerpt is just some random thingy i liked and tryed, unsuccesfully, to incorporate it into the above poem)
mesmerize me with a smile
through the narrow light
longing for its breath
another one... pretty straightfoward i guess
flickering rays illuminate the glistening leaves
rustling in the soft wind
waft and sway
as from a puff of fond memories
shimmering like
a sea of gold
hey, id appreciate MAYBE some good critique, im quite the novice (i desperately need the help!)
thx
also, my poetry is terrible, but im just doing it for my own benefit and enjoyment, so yea, just posting them to be crazy and for hunter and buri and other ppl to see them
heh, i wrote a nifty poem, see if you can find it out!
Rattling glass snake
Sway back and forth,
rags of dreadful steel
listen to that quiet purr
Entranced by its soothing song
Forms of stone chiseled
staring onward on the roads that lay ahead
as it journeys toward any direction
anticipate that final place!
(this excerpt is just some random thingy i liked and tryed, unsuccesfully, to incorporate it into the above poem)
mesmerize me with a smile
through the narrow light
longing for its breath
another one... pretty straightfoward i guess
flickering rays illuminate the glistening leaves
rustling in the soft wind
waft and sway
as from a puff of fond memories
shimmering like
a sea of gold
hey, id appreciate MAYBE some good critique, im quite the novice (i desperately need the help!)
thx