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Alphabet Series - A

Aug 20, 2007 11:56

His need for justice, the boundless love that he kept so tightly chained, redirected in the name of forsaking attachment, was matched by a talent so prodigious he shone brighter than the evening star. Blazed like a nova through a civilization grown both complacent and decadent.

There were some afterwards who claimed…very quietly…that it was ( Read more... )

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tinawiesen August 20 2007, 02:45:38 UTC

Hmm...I'll just wager a guess and say, "Anakin."

mysfytvisions August 20 2007, 02:47:57 UTC

Well it WAS kind of obvious, lol

tinawiesen August 20 2007, 02:55:40 UTC

Well, only because I know you and your love for all things Star Wars. LOL And, Anakin is very, very pretty. I've seen pictures!

mysfytvisions August 20 2007, 02:59:47 UTC

Okay...you win the five points :P

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geo4real August 20 2007, 03:49:12 UTC

You had me at "A" - of course!!!!! - may I have 5 points too, please?

Your piece is so loving, so poignant, that one such as I found it terribly hard to read. A decadent and complacent civilization will of course try to swallow up the light. And what a light it was.

I'm trying to work out who your narrator is. I have some ideas, but I'm still not sure.

It's a great idea to use a journal like this for writing exercises - it's not only fun to write, but very enjoyable to read. I love your alphabet idea. Please keep it going!

mysfytvisions August 20 2007, 10:14:54 UTC

Thank you so much, Geo - you made my night! *Bestows your five points with glee.*

And the narrator was the main reason this never progressed past the initial idea - originally intended to be an OC, a roughed out idea was of someone spying for Palpatine who changes sides as they grow to know Anakin. I couldn't quite get her/him/it to 'gel' ( at one stage I even toyed with it being a droid - after all, R2D2 displays attachment!) Resurrecting it now, I kept the idea of a first person narrator but left the identity as reader's choice.

The original idea sparked in those first few days after seeing ROTS - when I so wanted to know Anakin's TRUE story :P

And I do intend to try to get through the alphabet - though I'm not sure just how quickly :)

geo4real August 20 2007, 14:22:55 UTC

Ah... I see.. it's a great idea. Hang on to the vague outlines of that OC. You may find him/her/it popping up agian somewhere down the alphabet.

And speaking of the alphabet - it's about going there. Not about how quickly. I'll look forward to whatever you come up with!