Comments | mystifiedkiss: "trying to escape"

mystifiedkiss

"trying to escape"

Jun 27, 2005 12:29

Hello everyone, this past couple of days has been a blast. Saturday I went to the mall with Martika. We went to Emerald and window-shopped because none of us had any money. After that, we went to her friend's(from her church)house at Tautan(is that how u spell it?). It was boring but Brendan (her friend) was pretty nice so it wasn't that bad. We ( Read more... )

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mystifiedkiss June 27 2005, 17:33:32 UTC

thanks becca, ur the best!

_franklymydear June 27 2005, 17:45:54 UTC

darlin the poem was hella cool.
keep on writinggg

mystifiedkiss June 27 2005, 18:01:15 UTC

haha i can't believe that, it took me 3 hrs to write that lil thing.

stan8815 June 27 2005, 18:42:36 UTC

wow i guess ill just be the bitch and be critical ;)
i think its wicked awesome, but some of the words are kinda off, like it doesnt flow right
but i dont know, thats just my opinion and trying to help improvement so you can write poems that are even more amazing
and it really was good

mystifiedkiss June 27 2005, 19:05:44 UTC

thnx, i'll work on that.

betheneec08 June 27 2005, 19:20:05 UTC

(x it's good samia.
(X) yes please put it in
(x)...first of all...don't call it sucky. it wasn't. just fix some of the line breaks....like...where the line ends....play around with them, it can make the poem sound different.
on the last line when you give a s p a c e between each letter, give extra spaces between the words so that it's a little easier to distinguish the words.
keeeeep wrrriiiittttiinggg.

mystifiedkiss June 27 2005, 19:25:13 UTC

okay, on the last line i did give extra spaces between the words, but when i updated it, it didn't show up and i didn't kno how to fix it.

betheneec08 June 27 2005, 20:37:09 UTC

don't worry it's still awesome

liv08 July 3 2005, 19:59:39 UTC

samia your so cool anything you do is good :)