--I really wish I knew what he was thinking. He's been studying me...that outfit's probably for me. He's being awfully kind to a Warrior
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All I can say is armor details...nairaithironaxeNovember 15 2004, 16:05:45 UTC
I like the way it's going, very good.
Minute detials on the individual pieces of armor bring out the actual flavor of the armor itself. Also, Maybe just play out a couple of thought scenario's in her head, make them seem all but real to the audience and at the last second, break the Paragraph and return to the actual happenings of the room.
Like, how she breaks to "Men are all the same" Make it a spiel, tell how her dad told her that, describe the situation like her sitting before her father.. blah blah. (You knwo what I mean).
THEN snap back to the fourth prince, asking her about chess or whatever, it makes for great mind-fucking (lol, loss of a better way to put it)
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Minute detials on the individual pieces of armor bring out the actual flavor of the armor itself. Also, Maybe just play out a couple of thought scenario's in her head, make them seem all but real to the audience and at the last second, break the Paragraph and return to the actual happenings of the room.
Like, how she breaks to "Men are all the same" Make it a spiel, tell how her dad told her that, describe the situation like her sitting before her father.. blah blah. (You knwo what I mean).
THEN snap back to the fourth prince, asking her about chess or whatever, it makes for great mind-fucking (lol, loss of a better way to put it)
~Oro
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