Heel Turn

[n8tastrophe]

“THOCK…THOCK…THOCK…THOCK.” The sound of her new high-heeled shoes began to bounce from wall to wall, gaining in resonance as she descended the green-tiled stairwell. It was reminiscent of the clicking of one’s tongue on the roof of their mouth (if one was in a cavern). The sound bellowed through the tunnels the closer she came to the Metro

Comments

[rayaso]

What a great ending! Your entry was a lot of fun, and certainly described waiting for the subway in a very visceral manner.

[lilmissmagic71]

EEP! Well done!

[m_malcontent]

I knew the prompt so I sorta saw it coming, but this is exquisitely well done.

[bewize]

Very creepy.

[halfshellvenus]

Ooh, what a twist! And I was kind of afraid of that. Really, as a woman, any isolated place where you're alone with one or more men is often cause for concern. I wish that weren't true, but it is.

Might I suggest adding blank lines between your paragraphs? It would make the text much more readable, and your writing deserves the attention. :)