Comments | nagarebhoshi: Hi Ya!!!

nagarebhoshi

Hi Ya!!!

Mar 12, 2006 23:32

I feel kind of stupid doing this, but I have to. I want to know what other people think. I joined 50stories (don't know how to do a community cut) and I have to write, guess what, 50 stories. I just posted my first one and I'm kingd of nervous, because I don't write at all. This is my first try at writing something that is not poetry. I'm ( Read more... )

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(^ ^)b the_nick_is_ren March 13 2006, 23:10:47 UTC

Wow! Now that's impressive! Especially for the first attempt.
Yuki x Ren?? Does Yani know about it? xD This pairing is even crazier then You x Hyde. I just didn't expect it at first... I was planning to read through this piece a little bit later so I just scanned it at first and thought of going back to it later, but when I saw you mentioning this pairing I was like "whaaa??" and read it at once. xD
You know I’m not into yaoi at all, but I'm into writings.
I really like the contents. But just let me point something out what I was fighting with when I only started to write stories. You start all the sentences with "he", or any name of the one you are writing. Try to get rid of the direct word order and vary the sentence beginnings. This is something that I found a mistake in my first texts and I worked hard on getting rid of this. Pay attention to this, I think.
I general WELL DONE and looking forward to more. MORE!!
Good luck! (^*^)v

Re: (^ ^)b nagarebhoshi March 17 2006, 13:35:41 UTC

Thank you. I was nervous at first, but apparently it wasn't that bad. Yes Yanira knows about it. She was the first one who read it over at 50stories. I will look out for those things. Thanks for pointing that out ^_^
And thank you again! *hugs* (sorry I took so long to comment m(-_-)m)

Yaoi!!! dragontearz110 March 16 2006, 19:19:23 UTC

Aha! Ren-sama and Yuki-san yaoi....kinduva weird combo don't you think? I'm sure Gackt-sama will have a fit and prolly bitchslap Ren when he gets home for sleeping with another man *l* And I'm sure Hideto-sama won't be too happy about the neko putting his paws on his Yuki either...even tho nothing really "happened" between them. Still....technically, they did sleep together so....

Anyway, pretty good for your first time! Congrats! Imagino que a la gente le va a gustar asi que no creo que tengas que preocuparte por nada. Y ademas, como dijiste, es tu primera vez! Asi que si a alguien no le gusta que se muerda un ojo! Ya veras...se te va a ir haciendo mas facil con practica, y como tienes 49 historias mas que escribir, vas a tener bastante de eso.

Re: Yaoi!!! nagarebhoshi March 17 2006, 13:40:08 UTC

Yeah...I don't know what will happen when Gackt sees Ren and Yuki come together to his b-day party. He'll probably feel wierd. Especially Chacha. He's gonna be scratching his head going "what the fuck?" And since Hyde's going to be there too, Ren will be bitchin' around all the time because he hates Hyde, but will have to work with him because he's Yuki's friend as well. I don't know what else to do, but something cool. I don't like angst. FUN FUN FUN... Did you laugh reading it? Please be truthful...

Thank you very much. Pero no lo encontraste muy largo? Si la práctica la necesito. Ni siquiera se como empezar la segunda historia. Bueno, veré a ver que pasa. Hablamos luego.