Comments | namman: For a Friend.

namman

For a Friend.

Feb 08, 2005 02:02

A quick improv poem I wrote as a dedication to a friend. With a little revising, I'm going to add this to my list-of-lyrics-to-turn-into-songs. Anyone who's felt this way can relate (obviously). This is one of my darker writings. Very out-of-character for those who know me. Enjoy. (Also note a new record: updating LJ for three straight days ( Read more... )

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romancentherain February 9 2005, 00:11:11 UTC

i like.
its really good. though it is not very henry like from how well i know you, we all have our darker sides. even the peppy pink loving girl.
I BROUGHT TAPE TODAY :-) but you werent there. :-(
feel better.

house_liberi February 9 2005, 02:16:52 UTC

The flow feels too structured, too rigid. And too much rhyming is irritating, but that's just me. Then again, I suppose I should hear how the song turns out anyways before I judge...

namman February 9 2005, 02:49:52 UTC

Yeah man. Look at Dream Theater or Adagio and their lyrics.

house_liberi February 9 2005, 23:43:39 UTC

Interesting; I'll have to look in to some of their music. Too bad I retired from being a pirate, arr.