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nananaginip

[YYH] The Lines are Drawn

Mar 07, 2006 22:43

Title: The Lines are Drawn
31 Days Theme: March 7th/Hate blows a bubble of despair
Series: YYH
Character: Koenma/Botan
Rating: G
Notes: Writing because I need to get out of my rut. Written for 31_days. This short coming from an epic Koenma/Botan fanfic I haven't got around to writing. Rushed, unrevised, short.

( As a ferry girl, Botan wished for a lot of things. Once upon a time, she wished for him. Now, she went to him, knowing that it would never be possible, but hoping, hoping that something could be salvaged. )

riven, drabble, fanfic

Comments 4

swollenfoot March 10 2006, 12:38:53 UTC

@__@ Gwah, Allisan, I really do want to read the rest of Riven.

This snippet was right on the spot, from the mood to the characterization. The tension was gripping.

(But it cuts off. =P *prods you out of rut* )

nananaginip March 11 2006, 05:12:48 UTC

*rereads* Yeah, it does cut off, doesn't it? 0_o I have to wonder how on earth you guys manage to do drabbles. I mean, it's so short, how do you wrap everything up so fast?!

I wanna write the rest of Riven too. T_T I gotta swallow my pride and just write the darn thing like I did with this one. To hell with quality, LOL.

Thanks for commenting. *huggles*

swollenfoot March 11 2006, 10:18:22 UTC

like I said, the drabble/snippet was right on. it's perfect where you cut off because it maximizes the impact of the tension, somehow compartmentalizes it, a bubble of despair... at the same time, it makes you want to read more. =)

=P And I'm not an expert at drabbles. I have the same problem you do. ^^;;;;

nananaginip March 13 2006, 05:55:35 UTC

*loves Idi*

You do? But it seems like you've got the hang of it perfectly with your previous 31 days stuff. Short but somehow always whole.

You know, I just realized... I think I got the order of lightning and thunder wrong. Lightning flashes first, right? Urghhhhh. That darn "Good is Good" song got me all mixed up. T_T