Stone Walls (1/6) - [Fanfiction]
Title: Stone Walls
Summary: “You’re sick,” Sakura spat. In the next instant he was hovering over her and she found herself looking into bottomless black eyes. She felt his breath on her lips and he whispered, “Are you here to heal me, Sakura?”
Disclaimer: I don’t own Naruto.
Theme: Chance meetings
Prompt: Snoop
Medium: Fanfiction
Rating: K+ (might ( Read more... )
Summary: “You’re sick,” Sakura spat. In the next instant he was hovering over her and she found herself looking into bottomless black eyes. She felt his breath on her lips and he whispered, “Are you here to heal me, Sakura?”
Disclaimer: I don’t own Naruto.
Theme: Chance meetings
Prompt: Snoop
Medium: Fanfiction
Rating: K+ (might ( Read more... )
Comments 13
- Sasuke's darkness. I'm so glad you don't hold back on this, because, let's be frank, he's currently borderline insane. It oozes over everything he says--every word of which is spot-on and utterly IC. And the way it's treated! Matter-of-fact, not over-romanticised. That is good writing. He comes across as a little chatty, but you've got the in-universe explanation for it, so it doesn't seem OOC at all.
- Sakura being her badass self, still obviously with feelings for him, but being business-like in a way we haven't seen enough of in the manga. I'd have to quote every single line between these two in order to fully get down my favourite parts of their interaction, too.
- Your amazing grip on the mood and atmosphere of the scene.
The way you use language to describe everything without sight. Like: "When he collected himself again and completed the arc of his blade, the impact it made felt much shallower than he had intended." And so many others. I didn't even notice it ( ... )
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Yay, I'm glad you think this Sasuke was IC. :DD And that you thought Sakura was badass. ^^
I've never written a blind character before, let alone an action sequence, so your review made me really happy. xDDD You're, like, the best reviewer ever. lolz Hopefully I can get the next four chapters out with something resembling punctuality, haha.
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The descriptive language used, the dialogue, Sasuke's thoughts, characterisation... just wow!
Btw, I don't think Sasuke's OOC because he kept talking. Hey, he was pretty talkative in the Shippuden too when he met up with Team 7.
anyway, job well done.
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I'm glad you thought he was in character, I have so much trouble writing him b/c he goes from hot to cold on a dime. xD He *does* seem to get more chatty the crazier he gets, though. lol
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Oh, this was so good. :D :D
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