Temptation. (IkkaYummi)

[neen11]

Here's the first fiction of my table. Let me know what you all think.

Title: Temptation
Fandom: Bleach
Characters: Ikkaku/Yumichika
Prompt: #01 Temptation
Word Count:1081
Rating:PG 13
Summary:Ikkaku didn't know that a belly button could be so sexy
Disclaimer:Bleach sure as hell doesn't belong to me. It belongs to Tite Kubo and Shonen Jump.
NotesThanks to

Comments

[tellezara]

Lookin' good! Just two things:
spar[r]ing <--need to delete the square brackets around the r there
Seriously who fantasied about belly buttons? - need comma after Seriously.

Great story, you've done a good job of implementing the few beta suggestions as well ^^; Looking forward to seeing the next!

[derengelisrafel]

Not exactly my cup of tea, but it's readable.

[fallen_truth]

Hehe belly button fetish. I like it as an idea. ^__^

[neen11]

Thanks luv. Good to see you read it. I shall have the new chappie as soon as my lovely betas finish

[fayedoll]

this was so good ♥