FIC: Open Range, "Cloudburst"

[nenyaentwhistle]

Series: Open Range
Title: Cloudburst
Rating: R
Pairing: Ewan/Hayden
Word Count: 2,364 chapter; 2,930 overall
Disclaimer: I do not own any of these people and this is a work of fiction.
Summary: Once when the land was free, two cowboys learned to love.
Note: This was inspired by Annie Proulx's Brokeback Mountain.

Comments

[__untilnextyear]

I love how this is written. It resonates COWBOY and WESTERN, especially the similes and metaphors. Love the way you've written the characters. Love how it ties in with Brokeback Mountain (and dare I say it, Cold Mountain a bit XD) and still maintain the originality. It's brilliant.

[nenyaentwhistle]

I haven't actually seen Cold Mountain, it's just I don't know anything about Wyoming, so it'd be stupid to set it there. Then again I don't know about Texas back then either, but still I at least know the terrain a bit better here, considering I've seen some o fit.

Thanks, it's not going to be the same as Brokeback, though the style is similar :). Glad you liked it *huggles*

[handjob_susan]

At first I was iffy about reading this but I'm glad I took the time. I'm very interested to see where this will go and how much further Ewan and Hayden's relationship developes and to learn more about the pair themselves. I haven't even read the first chapter of this yet so I think I'll go check that out now. I have to mention, though, that the multiple uses of 'jus' irked me a bit but not so much so that this was unbearable to read. I overall enjoy your writing style and the plot for these boys. Hope you continue soon.

[nenyaentwhistle]

I tend to not proofread, so what I write on the first try is what you get. I simply don't have time, so if I reread it (since I don't write this in one sitting) I would probably eliminate some of the 'jus'.

I proofread my original stuff for my CW workshop so many times already, spent 5 hours yesterday on it. So I'd never write any fanfiction if I spent that much time analyzing it. Thanks, for me FF is a break from more hardcore, analytic, cram your meaning in your writing with each word.

[c1tylov3]

oh wow. i'm liking it already. :D moving a little too quickly but nothing to really complain about. ;) i like it that you're putting a little western "twang" into your story. feels like being in the countryside anyway.
can't wait for the next chapter. :)

[nenyaentwhistle]

It's not going to be any longer than Annie Proulx's short story, so technically this is a short story broken up into parts. There's probably 2 more parts, or one, depending how long the last one is. I can do long stuff, but it just ends at a good place.

I'm glad you like it :).

[c1tylov3]

i've never read any of annie proulx's stuff before but i've heard good things about her. :)
nah i don't mind whether the story is gonna be a long one or a short one. as long as it is good to read, i'm fine with it. ;)

[nenyaentwhistle]

hopefully it's going to be good :).

[ariespureblood]

Oh really.lol this is a fantastic fic and i love how it's turning out!! Can't get enough I want so much more. Hayden sounds so innocent, and Ewan is a horny jerk (i love him that way though lol) but he's naturally good hearted. lol

[nenyaentwhistle]

thanks :). I always wonder if people like the story or not. *hums* What makes you think Hayden's innocent? He could just be, you know, nice.

[nenyaentwhistle]

Heh, thanks. Do you like the hint of Star War with the horses and how they fought on different sides and how Hayden was on the one that was *cough* wrong? I think the parallels are lovely *snickers*