Please take some time to read my short story!
It has been well over a year since I last made a story. And comparing this to my other one, I could see that I can not describe things as well anymore. Anyway, here it is... inspired yet again by fact, another work of fiction! (Sorry talaga kung hindi ko kayang i-detach yung self ko sa kwento)
Prolouge:"Finish whatever you're doing and start ( Read more... )
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Since you left a comment on my blog and asked for a completely anonymous person to comment this story, I will definitely not insult you by sugar-coating my words and thoughts. All right? :D
It really is an interesting story. Made me wonder if it is real... but in any case, it's another boy-meets-girl situation - Fiesta style. An older woman eh? Cute. :D Some funny bone points there too, especially with that text from the uncle. Haha!
Honestly though, some misplaced commas, grammatical errors and too-formal words kept on distracting me throughout. Just tweak it a bit here and there and it'll be fine. ;) Aw heck, who am I to criticize anyway? I'm not a lit prof! bleh.
Well I won't say anything more until I read the next installation. 'Til then, Ciao! :D
crimsonwaters
p.s. Anonymity is my shield *hides*
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