FIC: First

[neros_violin]

Title: First
Author:: neros_violin
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Jared/Jensen
Word count: 7,064
Summary: PWP, for transfixeddream’spn-j2-xmas exchange prompt Jensen slowly but surely corrupts his neighbor's fresh-out-of-high school kid into all things sexy and gay. I think it’s possible that the corruption happened the other way around, but I hope you like it anyway!
Author’s Notes: Thanks

Comments

[equally_dour]

Nghh, this is too much hotness for one story. So damn good! *_*

[neros_violin]

Thank you, bb!

[tebtosca]

So fucking sexy and kind of schmoopy at the same time LOL. Great job! <3

[neros_violin]

The schmoop just sneaks up on me. I'll mean to write something filthy, and somehow it always ends up in schmoop-ville. ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[chemm80]

My thought on starting to read this was that it seemed very different from your usual style, maybe like you'd written it in a hurry, but as I read on I realized that I liked the rushed, almost breathless tone it has. Seems to fit very well with the story itself. I really liked this part:

“Owe me,” Jared says between heaving breaths, and Jensen just fucking loves this kid, loves the random, quick turns of his mind and his giant, too-vulnerable heart and his smart, filthy mouth. He loves the inner corner of his hazel fox-eyes, he loves the slope of his nose and his flushed, sharp cheekbones and his long, slender neck. He loves the way Jared looks in his bed, hair tousled and angry-red cock lying flat against the perfect plane of his stomach, and he has to hide his face in the bend of Jared’s neck and suck air to keep from losing it.

Inserting Jensen's strong feelings for Jared right in the middle of the sex scene gives it a very poignant feel, I think. Of course, it's also smoking hot. :D I enjoyed this very much, hon.

[neros_violin]

My thought on starting to read this was that it seemed very different from your usual style, maybe like you'd written it in a hurry

Believe it or not, this actually took me a while to write. It took me in fits and starts, but once I finally hit on the train-of-thought kind of pace, that's what seemed to work. I enjoyed writing this way - definitely not my usual, as you said (lacking my usual wording fetish, lol), but playing around with something different was fun. I'm glad to hear that it worked for you, in the end!

Inserting Jensen's strong feelings for Jared right in the middle of the sex scene gives it a very poignant feel, I think.

I don't know if I can write sex without that... connection moment. I guess that's one of my kinks? ;)

I hope you had a wonderful Christmas, hon!

[philomel]

UNF. And also? Nnnnnngh.

[neros_violin]

Christmas porn is the best porn, y/y?

<3

[riyku]

Holy goddamn that was hot. HOT. And although my mind is a little melted with the hot, I shall power through and endeavor to leave a proper comment. Love, love, loved Jensen's internal dialogue here, the way he skimmed and skipped around his feelings for Jared until he just couldn't anymore. A wonderful dynamic you established between the two of them, a fun, playful sorta push and pull that keeps both of them on their toes. Plus, ALL THE HOT. Thank you so much for this!

Also, adding you as a friend if that's okay? I honestly don't know why I haven't before.

[neros_violin]

Thank you! I really had fun writing it, and I'm very happy to hear that the push-pull between them (and within Jensen) came through. :D

(Definitely friending! IDK why we haven't before, either, but I'm friending you right now, too!)