Fic: Rapine

[dune_drd]

rapine \RAP-in\, noun

Comments

[doona_rose]

Wow. Yes, you did almost make me cry and with drabbles. Wow. Again.

Let’s see what I love about this. The fact you can use such simple, concise language to paint a thousand pictures and emotions and do it so well. Yes, that’s what I love most. And it’s because not many people (Definitely not me) can do it all and you do it beautifully and make it look effortless. So well done.

Some of the phrasing really reached out of the screen and grabbed me:
thing-from-poll-I've-never-written-before
The ape thinks I’m a cat, now that’s brilliant
lost in a roar of pleasureThose would be my top three, just in terms of phrasing. In terms of the actual ideas of this. Wow, going through, but by bit to pick them out and there are too many. I love the evolution of their relationship. I love the mistakes and the way he knows they’re mistakes and doesn’t do anything to stop them, because he knows. The way it ends, with him in the rain is just heart-wrenching and beautiful and symmetrical

[dune_drd]

Aw, you're too nice to me you know that? Thank you so much for your comment, it made me smile on an otherwise crappy day

[justagametoyou]

Oh my goodness.

He travels to the Eye of Orion and stands in the rain for a very long time.

I love you and your writing and your little tense sentences of genius forever and ever.

[dune_drd]

thank you so much :)

[coaldustcanary]

Five years and it felt like forever. He wonders how she mucked up his sense of time so much.

Oh.

I love this, each of these, in fact. And each one is really completely self-contained yet tells a perfect story all together.

Love this, yes, definitely.

[dune_drd]

good to hear that, thank you

[__kali__]

Oh wow...

[dune_drd]

... that's a good thing if you say that, right? Thanks :)

[__kali__]

oh yes, definitely a good thing. :)

[dune_drd]

thanks :)