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michele659 in newford

Short Story from "The Sting"

Oct 20, 2007 23:28

The Shot Glass

Pairing: Henry Gondorff/Johnny Hooker-“The Sting”

Rating: PG-13

Summary: This story comes from the scene in the movie where Hooker has run from Snyder and is cut and bleeding. He is forced to tell Henry and Billie about what happened with Snyder and why he ( Read more... )

Comments 13

ticken October 21 2007, 12:40:33 UTC

Very nicely written Michelle!!

I especially love the last few lines :)

We need more fanfic on The Sting.

michele659 October 21 2007, 21:24:13 UTC

I'm so glad you liked this! The last few lines are my favorites as well. I struggled with them,and initially had a different last line.So I'm especially glad you liked them!
Thanks for reading and giving me feedback-I plan on writing more soon. I agree that we need more fanfic for The Sting!

giglet October 21 2007, 20:16:57 UTC

Oh. I liked this! Especially:
His eyes looked at Johnny with concern and worry. Johnny found he couldn’t say anything intelligent in response. He was too busy staring into the depths of Henry’s eyes and wondering why he suddenly felt that they were the only ones in the room.

Gotta love that sexual tension!

Thank you for writing and sharing this!

michele659 October 21 2007, 21:11:27 UTC

I'm glad the sexual tension aspect came through, because I was trying to convey that. I felt the two of them would be kind of hesitant and not really know how to deal with their feelings.
Thank you for reading and commenting- I'm glad you liked it!

petronelle October 21 2007, 20:19:44 UTC

It's good to see a story in this fandom!

I particularly liked:
Henry fixed him with a penetrating gaze that seemed to go right through him. He was too damn smart.

It rings true for me as the way Johnny feels about Henry, especially early on while there's still a sheen of "The Great Henry Gondorff" about him.

michele659 October 21 2007, 21:20:20 UTC

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on the story!
I love these characters and I am glad that the description of Johnny's feelings for Henry sounded true to you.

ticken October 22 2007, 10:50:06 UTC

I have almost finished the first part of my 'Sting' saga, but after reading this and Giglet's, I am too scared to post it :P
You guys just write so damn well!!

michele659 October 23 2007, 03:58:41 UTC

Thank you for the compliment, but please post your story :0)
I'm looking forward to reading it,and as much fiction from "The Sting" that I can !

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giglet October 23 2007, 14:07:11 UTC

Hey! I just realized that this was the shot glass story you mentioned in a comment back in July!

I'm so so glad that you wrote it!

michele659 October 23 2007, 16:55:39 UTC

Thank you! Yes, it took me a while! Certain parts of it didn't seem right,so I revised them a few times! Originally I had them kiss,but thought it better to have the sexual tension remain in the story.
I also felt kind of nervous about posting,so I understand how Ticken feels!
But I'm glad I did,and hope she does,too!

Can't wait to have my say anonymous April 13 2011, 18:52:20 UTC

Hey - I am definitely delighted to find this. cool job!

Re: Can't wait to have my say michele659 April 14 2011, 06:15:43 UTC

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on the story-I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
It was a nice surprise to get feedback on a story I wrote a while ago,so thanks again.You definitely put a smile on my face!