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Henry and Hooker - Part One - The Beginning

Oct 23, 2007 20:18

Pairing: Henry Gondorff/Johnny Hooker-The Sting
Rating: G
Summary: Part One - The beginning of Hooker and Henry's relationship. Their mutual friend, Luther Coleman has been murdered by mob boss, Doyle Lonnegan. Hooker drags Henry out of a drunken stupor in order to be taught the big con so he can gain revenge.
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giglet October 23 2007, 14:01:57 UTC

Oh yay!

This expansion of the scenes in the movie really fills me with glee!

To hit Doyle Lonnegan for your first big con - well it took some balls.
But loyalty and balls could also end up getting you killed.

I love that, the same way I love the lines in the movie:
Johnny: "He's not as tough as he thinks he is."
Henry: "Neither are we."

Thank you for writing this, and for sharing it!

ticken October 23 2007, 14:35:13 UTC

Thank you Giglet.

I am a little wary of writing fiction as I am not very good at it. This is the first time I have ever attempted to write a story for public consumption. I don't have a lot of background knowledge on poker, or depression-era Americana so I am trying to focus more on developing the story between Hooker and Henry rather than the con itself.

There are a couple of parts, so more to come. Hopefully I get better at this. I read your stuff and think WOW! How the hell do people write like that?

giglet October 23 2007, 16:00:14 UTC

More parts are good! And the Johnny/Henry story is a lovely place to focus!

I read your stuff and think WOW! How the hell do people write like that?

Thank you so much! I think this may be the nicest compliment I've ever been given!

And to answer the rhetorical question -- some people just seem naturally talented. And then there's people like me who have years of literatures classes and decades of practice at fiction and almost twenty years of writing (much less interesting stuff) full time. Eventually something decent is going to pop out.

Have you considered writing drabbles? I love them, because they're only 100 words long, so one just focuses on one thing or a tiny moment (like when Johnny first sees Luther on the ground or when Henry's in the bathtub, waking up and noticing Johnny for the first time). I also like them because one can just handwave some details (oh, they're playing poker) and not explain anything about it. I really *really* like drabbles!

michele659 October 24 2007, 02:50:56 UTC

I enjoyed this story! It was interesting the way you describe their meeting- including both of their points of view. In the movie this scene is mostly Johnny's point of view.
I like the details you put into the story,and the way you set the scene was very good. For example,your description of Billie's place having a combination of brightness and being kind of rusty or rundown. It followed the description of Henry at that point,and Johnny in a way.
I thought the ending was great, with Henry putting his arm around Hooker's shoulders and the two of them happy and filled with energy at the thought of the con,and of having a partnership

You don't really have to worry about details of poker or the Depression.You can just follow what the movie showed. But I would be very happy if you focused only on Johnny and Henry,they were the best part of the movie!