Comments | nextdrinksonme: Holy crap writing that I like.

nextdrinksonme

Holy crap writing that I like.

Jan 15, 2014 22:22

This is a piece that I did for my creative writing class. The prompt was to write about a situation where we feel/felt invalidated and dismissed. I wrote about being bi. It's kind of long and a collection of connected vignettes more than anything. I'd really love to have feedback, though. For rizzle.

( “Look, all I’m saying is that I don’t believe for a minute she really wants to fuck women.” )

writing: creative non fiction, bisexuals are unicorns, writing: stories, school

Comments 3

ululare January 16 2014, 07:59:56 UTC

This was really well written but I wanted to punch almost every character, like the people pursing their lips at Kevin for not knowing what bears are, and Tori and idk, even Kevin at places.

I also just feel really awkward discussing my own sexuality so I was way too connected to the story, hahaha.

But I couldn't sotp reading it and found it very realistic in both the dialogue and the ssssssssssstory (plot? set up?)? And I didn't know what Baker Acting someone was, beforehand, either. Thanks?

I dig it.

1_2_suckerpunch January 16 2014, 10:04:50 UTC

Aaaaaaah right in my feels. :-/

wherearethebees January 21 2014, 03:26:46 UTC

(I read your journal sometimes! Surprise!)

My feedback is: how do you think this story would be different if the characters-who-are-not-the-speaker were not positioned as being so, so, so clueless and unlikeable? What impact do you think it has on the reader that the speaker is the only "informed" character of the bunch? What would choosing to focus a piece of the same length on only 3 moments do to the piece?