fic - that girl's an adventure - puck/rachel (r)

[niceskin]

title: that girl's an adventure
ship: puck/rachel.
rating: r
summary: He wants to murder that dopey look. He does. Just, one day notice it and stab it in it's douchebag eyes with his Sai swords. Massacre the fucker.
disclaimer: wish i owned.
a/n: smc_27 & I traded prompts, and this is me fulfilling my side of that bargain. goingvintage's left over prompt got used,

Comments

Brilliant!

[blackgem88]

Loved it!

[whenitsquiet]

Loved it!

[smc_27]

Okay, so I knew this was going to be awesome.

And then I read "Don't have a girlfriend. Fuck off. You're a bunch of… you fuck off. Fuckers." and I was laughing so effing hard it's cray cray.

And "I'm gonna kiss you." / "You're gonna like it." made me swoon a little.

Their entire conversation at the end was really great. I especially loved how you had Rachel voice her insecurities, and then had Puck promise he wouldn't hate her. Freaking adorable.

And up against a tree. How could she take that away from him??? It's his dream. I'm sure hell convince her...

Thanks for this, bb! Really, really great!

[tatereed]

I think you meant, "He orders her tea the way she likes it and she kisses him in return, and he's pretty sure he could get used to this, belonging with someone."

I really like this story, but there are always a truckload of italics throughout your pieces and it's irritating. I understand that you're trying to capture Puck's voice, but it's excessive and most--if not all--lose their appeal.

[tatereed]

No, don't apologize. I realize that I came off too harsh. It's more just like your writing is superb, and it feels like the italics are trying to overcompensate for something. It's just something that maybe, in the future, if you are interested in making writing a career, you can ask your editors to look out for (though I'm sure they'll do it for you regardless because they're pretty cut-throat).

I really do like reading your fics. I always read them when I see it posted on the Puck and Rachel community. I think you capture voices very well, (even though the show itself doesn't give a well-rounded representation of the characters), and the situations are always good. Plus the sex scenes don't make me uncomfortable so double gold stars on that.

[she_vacillates]

voted~