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[nightshadow]

ok so we have to write a piece in the writing center that we are supposed to publish or something.. this is an idea.. please give me good crictsim.. I can take it if you think it's bad. You can even leave it without you name.. no hard feelings. I need to work on it a lot anyway. but i have a feeling no one will read it.. o well. I know kate

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[receivemysignal]

This was the first time I had ever read anything you've written. Very nice Christina. I'm not too good with criticism, I think it's perfectly fine the way it is. I miss seeing you in the morning, we hardly ever get a chance to talk anymore. I'll see you around.

-Mike-

[sideoftheroad]

aw, a nice little prose by miss christina rovet. way to go, love. only thing is "pocess" may be changed to "possess"? simple mistake. that is as far as my criticism goes. nicely done!

[lostameye]

hi
i miss you two terribly.

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and for the paragraph i agree it is lovely.
how do you people write with so little being verbs i am jealouse, it takes me forever, how sad :(

[sideoftheroad]

for as much as you miss us, we miss you 878327598 times more.

[lostameye]

bwah!
sounds doubtfull to me!