The Patron Saint of Coffee

[nikkicubwrites]

Another 'snapshot' of the Murray siblings, about a year before the planned opening of the novel-length story.

I'll post more supernatural stories involving them at some point. e.e It's supposed to be modern fantasy... but, the idea of these is to more deeply familiarize myself with them. (I insist on knowing my characters' ages, birthdays,

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[serialfiller]

Hey there. I just friended you from add a writer.

I love snippets like this, I think getting to know your characters this thoroughly is not only awesome, but nessasary to give them a feel readers can relate too. I try to do it as well. (If fact I spend entire afternoons contemplating my characters' favorite colors and foods, and the reasons.) You really have to know volumes that might never come up in the story. And it shows you put that kind of thought into them, in just this little snippet I can get a clear impression of both of these character.

the verdict is: supercute.

[arrenlex]

"Well, I am fifteen now."

Whoa. What?! Everything about this passage implies she's about 5 and he's maybe 9-10.

And yep, they got much older as the dialogue progressed. At the beginning, they seem as old as they are in the lightning storm excerpt you have down there which I read first.

The beginning is super cute, and the end is funny and interesting, they just seem... disjointed. Sorry if I'm just crazy. That's just me.

Great writing!

[nikkicubwrites]

Whoa. What?! Everything about this passage implies she's about 5 and he's maybe 9-10.

Um... it does? Sorry, I've never heard a five year old seriously discuss saints and ordinations. XD Perhaps impressions from the last story are left over, and it would be better for me to add timeline notes?

Disjointed at the beginning is kind of intentional; Justin has been interrupted in the middle of something for an odd question, with Madeleine teasing him until they get on the same page.

[arrenlex]

But I understand they're the children of some religious figure? Then they would have grown up with that terminology. Or am I making random things up?

[nikkicubwrites]

Yeah, I have NO idea where you're getting that. ^_^; They're Catholic, but their father is not terribly religious. (And if they WERE the children of Catholic religious figures, they'd be raised far away from them as Cathloic clergy is celibate.)