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[niliwen]

A/N: Prompt: Parrot"is there anything you've read that Anton did not read first

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[bluegerl]

Teehee, that Other meaning of Parrot. oh great Nili. teehee. Bless. Short, sweet and very to the point!

[niliwen]

Thanks! Though makes me wonder what Ellen is going to do now!

[bluegerl]

I don't know 'the second sex' but she should avoid reading it. I think she should go for Marx, or Mein Kampf. Sit in a corner with her Coke and whatever, and really LISTEN to what these books are saying behind the obvious. THEN she could go and bash Cass round the ears for DAYS and Cass wouldn't get a word in edgeways. Teehee. She'd have a ball with Anton too cos he's maybe not read them, not 'properly'... teehee.

[niliwen]

I think that if Ellen knows what she's doing, she'll give "The Second Sex" a good read (it's by de Beauvoir, it's a feminist classic), then go on to read Naomi Wolf.

Or better yet, she can outdo both Anton and Cas by reading...Chomsky.

[innana88]

I'm really enjoying your flash fic trend, Niliwen!

[niliwen]

Thanks! I think it's the best way to get through these tricky characters of mine this year!

[innana88]

Definitely a fun and creative way to explore character. For sure!

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[missflyer]

Nice little moment-slice, and I like Cassandra's snide remarks, especially her conversation-ender. Just like a sister would say, foster or not (I have two younger ones, so I speak from experience, haha).

Grammar wise, looks like that 'i' in 'is' didn't get capitalized at the very beginning -- tricky quotations throwing it off ;)

"We're studying those too in school." -- using 'too' sounds off, since it is a different reason for her reading it why she's getting into history. Maybe: "We're studying that in school (together?)"

Other than that, looks good!

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[niliwen]

Thanks! Grammar points noted.

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[bardiphouka]

Love the flash fic. As to the grammar I would suggest one thing. There is accurate grammar, and then there is grammar which is accurate for the characters you are writing. One should always try to have something in a character that differs from standard English. Unless, of course, all your characters are in media?

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[niliwen]

Hello!

What do you mean by in media? Or maybe I just haven't gotten their voices straight yet.

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[bardiphouka]

People who are in media are generally trained to speak the revised standard of whatever their language is...without dialect.

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[niliwen]

Ah. The thing is I don't know their dialect yet; they are living in a city of messed up origins. To be exact I don't know the girls' yet (Anton's, I'm sure of).

Thanks.