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[niliwen]

Staycation

"Living with you is like walking on eggshells."
A blanket rustled, revealing a disheveled head of mousy hair. "Shhh. Don't remind me."
"We have to talk about it---"
"You're too noisy Macky. One more peep, you're out of the room."
"Cas..."
A pillow sailed across the room, hitting Macky in the face. "Seriously, what part of a stay-cation

Comments

dodos rolling out the edit wagon,he pauses

[bardiphouka]

I really cannot decide if this is a vignette or a sort of prose poem. Either way, a lovely wee bit of work there.

Re: dodos rolling out the edit wagon,he pauses

[niliwen]

Thanks! More of a vignette actually.

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[fawatson]

Sorry I am so late with this!

This is a lovely scene. I am impressed with how you have painted a picture in so few words.

I found it slightly misleading though, as I kept wondering why the first sentence?

The different attitudes between Cas and Macky to sleep and dreams is interesting and, I think, offers you scope to go a little further.

Re: Editor reporting (late!) for duty

[niliwen]

No probs!

The first sentence is a random thought. Yeah, I should do something about that.