Comments | ninja_lurker: Unasked, version 2 (Team Castle, Ch. 6)

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Unasked, version 2 (Team Castle, Ch. 6)

Apr 11, 2010 21:53

Title: Unasked, version 2 (Team Castle, Ch. 6)
Characters/pairings: Kate Beckett/Rick Castle
Rating/Warnings: PG
Summary: It’s the kind of question that can’t be unasked.
Spoilers: none

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Comments 5

rocketgirl2 April 12 2010, 04:59:31 UTC

I swear, this gets better every time you work on it. Which is probably a good thing, but sometimes it doesn't happen that way…but yeah, I really liked what you did with this! Especially the things you added on to the last part. It'll be interesting to see how that turns out! :)
I can't wait for your next update!

ninja_lurker April 12 2010, 06:04:02 UTC

Thanks! It feels more balanced now. Which is not in any way to devalue your comments; I couldn't've gotten here if I hadn't gone through those other drafts first.

rocketgirl2 April 12 2010, 11:48:47 UTC

Oh. That's completely fine; I understand how it goes. It looks like other people saw totally different things than I did, which just happens sometimes, and I understand that you'd want to fix those, too.

graycardinal April 12 2010, 05:45:24 UTC

The first version of this was very good indeed -- and this one improves on it. (Specifically, the fine-tuning of Alexis' dialogue is a good touch, and the expansion of the last segment makes it better-rounded and balances out the chapter more effectively, I think.)

That said, I'd be wary of Perpetual Rewrite Syndrome; at some point, one has to declare something's done and move forward.

One other observation: one of the challenges of fanfic, especially when it's written and reviewed/critiqued in a community like this one, is keeping your own material fresh and coming up with unique angles on a relationship that many of us are exploring all at once. I think you're doing unusually well at that, too -- and it is not a coincidence that I think your take and mine on the Castle/Beckett dynamic are similar in a number of ways. It would be awfully easy for us to step on each other's narrative toes with the "Team Castle" and "Autumn of Our Content" universes...but the spins and the voices are just different enough that I think we ( ... )

ninja_lurker April 12 2010, 06:48:21 UTC

I can tweak and move commas around until the cows come home, but usually I know when a piece is essentially done. I revised this chapter several times but didn't get that feeling until this last draft. I won't be revising Ch. 6 further, thank the lords of Kobol-it is definitely time to move on ( ... )