Short Story: Traffic

[kazeryuu]

Traffic
Date Started: Sometime Around November Last Year
Date Finished: February 11, 2005

Comments

[miir]

Interesting twist at the end, though it took me several reads to get it. :D

(I WAS STILL IN A DOTA MINDSET OKAY. T_T)

[kazeryuu]

Thanks :D

This is actually a writing exercise gone horribly wrong but came out right in the end.

[miir]

I fail to see the "horrible" part *squint*

Cool, writing exercise that became a story. What were you supposed to exercise anyway? (Yes I know corny pagkaphrase but bear with me T____T Corny mode yata ako tonight.)

[kazeryuu]

Relate death and Katipunan Traffic without explicitly saying that someone died.

This was based on the Katipunan flood two years ago, where I got stuck in traffic until 11. O_O

[yasashiikaze]

I remember reading this for the first time, ages ago. Back then, I was biased since I knew the real story behind this short story. (Yes, sometimes it sucks to know more than you should.)

Reading this again, I found out it is really well-written. Yes, interesting twist in the end. Sans the bias, I actually liked the snippets of flashback. Technically, it was almost a one-character story, which almost amused me. 'Almost' since there was still the vendor. However, removing the introduction (where the persona talks with the flower shop vendor) would remove majority of the implied plot. Boo X_X

I don't know. This story touched something deep within. Maybe a memory. Or have I forgotten?... >__<

-dumbfoundedly staring into space-

[kazeryuu]

Umm. Bayside yata yang sinasabi mo.

But really, thanks. :D

Might start writing again soon.

[yasashiikaze]

Nope, tis this one. Damn, I've read every single one of your stories.
Although most of the time, I don't comment at all. XP

Most of the time, I reflect on stories and poems without ever commenting on it. That's why most of the time I find it hard to put in words what I feel/think.

Mispractice kills virtue.

[kazeryuu]

At gumising ka gago, spacing out is my job. XD