Comments | northsealily: Kiss

northsealily

Kiss

Feb 23, 2008 17:30

Kiss

Short one shot written for LoveFest. Canon, rating **. Tent sex. Sorry, no kinks. Appx. 700 words.

Ennis and Jack are Annie Proulx's characters. This is the first time I've written fiction since I was 10.

I’m almost awake. I feel like I did sometimes when I was eight years old, it’s nice and warm. I hear something; momma is putting more wood ( Read more... )

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carol1943 February 24 2008, 15:54:36 UTC

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful... a PERFECT Ennis!

Carol

northsealily February 27 2008, 10:55:07 UTC

Oh, thank you!

we_work_hard February 24 2008, 17:20:49 UTC

I really hope you write more, I think you've captured the movie Ennis perfectly - a scene like this would slot into the film really well (I always wish there was more tenderness shown between the two of them, that the SNIT had lasted a bit longer. Maybe a few hours longer :) )

Please write more! xxx

northsealily February 27 2008, 10:56:48 UTC

Thank you! Heh, yeah a few hours sounds good!

gilli_ann February 24 2008, 18:00:39 UTC

I think this fic deserves a new term to be coined - it's a perfect SMIT!

:-)

Truly wonderful and sensitive writing, you captured that moment lovingly and with care for the both of them and their canon characters. Thank you.

northsealily February 27 2008, 10:59:51 UTC

Thank you so much! SMIT, I like that. :)

snowtonight February 24 2008, 18:45:49 UTC

imo, virgin!Ennis is kink so no apology needed :) This was so good, I'm really glad you wrote it. I really liked Ennis looking at Jack and thinking back to the stolen kiss he gave that foal. Jack is pure beauty and love. Shy Ennis does bad things to me, thank you!.

lolitaray February 24 2008, 21:33:49 UTC

I totally agree with this!

Shy!virgin!Ennis...damn...

Loved this one shot.

northsealily February 27 2008, 11:02:23 UTC

Thank you!! I guess he's my kink too. ;D

rosiet February 24 2008, 19:48:46 UTC

Wow. This was truly gorgeous! I adored it, so many beautiful lines...but I loved this..

**It’s still almost dark but I can see one nipple. It looks sleepy, not like last night when it was pointy and I touched it with the tip of my tongue. Very quickly, hoping he wouldn’t notice, because it felt strange to want to do that. I want to touch it again but I’m afraid of waking him up. It looks soft, like the muzzle of the day-old foal I saw at Petersen’s farm when I was a boy. When no one could see, I gave the foal a kiss. He was the prettiest thing I had ever seen.***

I can just see the morning after the SNIT, being very like this. Beautifully done, Thank you.
Rosie
x

northsealily February 27 2008, 11:03:27 UTC

Thank you! I don't know where the nipple/muzzle thing came from but I'm glad you liked it.