Indulgences - MF Contest Entry

[northstar333]

Yay! I completed it FINALLY. I didn't think it'd take me this long. :P Still not 100% sure about the title, but the body/text is mostly done and that's the time consuming part.

And now...this is where you guys come in. Will you look it over for me? Please? Just a quick beta job, point out anything you see glaringly wrong, suggestions on how to make

Comments

[anonymous]

Hey there! I've just discovered your Sess/Rin stories and this is definitely on my list of favorites from you. Your Sess voice is great and you've created a very believable internal struggle for him here that's so compelling. I love the way you weave Rin through his inner and outer worlds with such deftness. She truly pulls him out despite himself and using the game of hide and seek is perfect in literal and metaphorical sense! Bravo. ^_^

If you're still looking for titles, I think "Hiding Places" would be the obvious choice.

[northstar333]

That is a good title! I've already submitted the story though. :P I wanted to make sure I got it posted in time to enter the contest. After the contest is done though, I'll think about changing it.

I'm glad you've enjoyed my stories! :)