Losing My Religion

[nortonamo]

Title: Losing My Religion
Pairing: ZiKyung -er one sided
Genre: songfic, of sorts
Rating: R(language and rated R fics are hip hap)
Summary: Kyung loves Zico, but in a heterosexual dominated country where the concept of homosexuality is still taboo, he must keep his feelings secret to himself.
Note: This is the spawn of me listening to too much R.E.M

Comments

[hotpixel]

well, like i said, i thought this was really good. so sad ;___; but i love realism in fic, and i think you did a great job capturing a situation like this. and i'm glad that it ended on an uplifting note ;____;

um, the nitpicky things:
- "sociably acceptable" i think you mean socially acceptable
- maknae opts* out of
- "Jiho and Jihoon catch back up with Kyung" except then you say Jihoon is missing? so maybe reword that bit slightly?
- "Sorry for pushing you last night" except a week has passed (right?) so maybe rewording, the other night, or whatever

that's it! i think you did a really good job :3 i hope you keep writing mooooooore for block b

[nortonamo]

Made the corrections, thank you so much again <3
I'm going to try and write more. I'm taking creative writing class at school, so this is really good practice.

Thank you again for reading and beta'ing it <3 and I'm glad you liked it n_n

[annab_h]

Awww sad but totally enjoyable!! :D Their reactions are so real...( i can imagine Zico acting like that) !!
Poor Kyung, i hope he can find someone who really loves him!

[nortonamo]

Poor Kyung, i hope he can find someone who really loves him!

I'm right here hahah.

Thank you for reading and enjoying <3

[annab_h]

HAHAHAHAHAHAH i was thinking the same thing! But i meant in the story... xDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
gosh....he is so damn cute ♥♥♥♥

Thank you for sharing! :D

[countrymir]

There next free day nears and...
it's supposed to be their.

i think its pretty damn good for your first piece to be honest. i really liked the motif that you used in which you kinds kept having kyung feel either dead tired or recharged based on whether or not jiho had touched him. you kept to it so it really ingrained it into the fic really well. i don't see why you shouldn't post it to the main fic comm lol. in every comm there is both bad and good fic and thankfully yours falls in the latter i believe

[nortonamo]

Omg there/their/they're is the thing that always gets me. I re-read this twice before I published it looking for just that. -- of course I missed one.
but thank you for pointing it out <3

And thank you for reading and liking. A few other people said I should post it to the fic comm, so now I feel more confident in doing so. Thank you again for reading <3

[kittensrambling]

Yes, hi, I'd like to demand a follow up where Jiho comes to his damn senses and proclaims his undying love to Kyung. Yes, this needs to happen. LOL

But I loved this in all its heartwrenching glory. The last scene where Kyung becomes maternal in tucking Jiho back into bed and Jiho, half asleep, catching him to say thank you was beautiful. *sigh*

I still demand that follow up though.

[nortonamo]

I was thinking of making another part to it. I mean, I can't leave my boo alone with a broken heart!

Thanks for reading and loving it ;o; that makes me feel happy n_n

[ayaisdifferent]

first i was shocked because i read 'He watches at Jihos and Jihoons dick...' or something like this and then i had to reread it :D
but that whole story was so sad ;___;
i loved it though, you did really did a good job!

[nortonamo]

lol

Thank you for reading and liking it <3 it makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside knowing people read my fic and liked it. okay this sounds weird lol ;o;