Testing What I Know: Chapter 11-Lucky Witnesses (continued)

[not_my_memory]

Chapter 11-Part 1

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Chapter 11- Part 2

Matt didn’t know exactly how long he had been sitting on his patch of the bench, but it was long enough to fully numb the flesh of his ass and upper thighs. Attempting to stand up proved harshly unsuccessful, and he quickly dropped back down onto the unforgiving wooden slats.

Dean seemed to find

Comments

[zuzi82]

*tackles FC*

God, I've missed this!

*off to read*

[not_my_memory]

:D
That was dizzyingly fast, I hadn't even got it posted everywhere! Damn!

[zuzi82]

Yeah, friends page stalking. Sue me!! Hehe.

Ah, it was about time. As usual, I absolutely adore your writing style, your choices about syntax and grammar. Do I have do be completely honest, though, I felt like the sex was kinda rushed for two "virgin" boys. (please don't kill me, 't was hot, but I don't know, I kinda expected it to be a lot more...fumbled?) Maybe that's just me. Overall, though, I love how you make them interact, sounds totally believable, for once I'm seeing real teenagers and not transpositions of 14 years old writers, if you know what I mean...

[not_my_memory]

Legal procedings are underway about the stalking;) Does the first part of the chapter show up okay? I fucked up a bit with the ljcuts...oopsies
No worries: I won't kill you, and I do appreciate the feedback.

Originally I intended on it being more fumble-ish, I was gonna write it with them being frustratingly inexperienced, but then when I did write it like that I just got frustrated myself, so I went with the easier option...So I know what you mean there.

Thank you for the compliment. Finally, someone else who knows what syntax is!Every time I use the word I get a funny look...
<3

[lady_blue_peach]

*Stands and claps* Hottest Matt Brian Highschool sex ever!!!!!! This is soooooooooo good...

..I wonder about Brent though...and what Zacky will say about this...mmmm so many questions...but again great chapter...

[colt_ruby]

Heh, I like how easy Matt let Brian top! (It would be hot ether way).

Matt is just so polite, that's too adorable for me to handle! I love it.

What's with that Dean dude? Love triangle? Oh, the wonders of adolescent love...

Great Chapter, and when I saw that it had 2 parts I couldn't stop smiling like mad, it totally made my day!

[nevrlivedinfear]

little brothers are dicks. about damn time they hooked up lol

[darkplace606]

oh my goodness Brent. I love this kid, he's so sad and so angry about it! I hope Brian can get through to him, Jason sounds like such a dick.

and oh boy yes they had boy sex! good for them, i hope neither of them gets all dramatic in the morning :)

awesome 2 part update! i loved the image of zack happily fighting his little bro, it was great. thanks for sharing your awesome writing with us!
xoxo