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[nowingdangel]

Ive been doing a whole lot of nothing lately. Heres something for you to ponder.

(Back)Ward Psych(Osis)

Smokestacks line the box.
With white walls.
With a white sweater.
With arms folded against my chest.
Like a clock on the wall.
Always moving.
But never in motion.
Mind racing.
Eyes screaming.
Staring back.

Comments

[theuprisal]

(Pen)is?

[nowingdangel]

Constructive comments would be better, Im not in a good mood...

[csl316]

lol, cat

all's i can say is if that's a mudvayne reference (with the title, which i really think it is cuz you have a mudvayne dvd), then i dont think it's that good unless "versive pat" has some kind of hidden meaning.

like, (Per)version of the Truth is how we're getting a version of the truth, but it's perverted cuz what we're getting it's so fucked up and changed and untrue. so it's not just random parantheses. "truth/ doesn't exist/ it doesn't exist". then "lies, lies, LIES!"

(K)now f(orever)... hmm, maybe "now f" has some kind of significance, i dunno. but it does go "know/ now/ know/ now"

so yeah, unless (Per)versive Pat(ient)has some kind of hidden meaning, or if it's a play on words, i think the title should be changed.
i think it's just random paranethesis and it is awfully distracting

it thought this was interesting, though:
Like a clock on the wall.
Always moving.
But never in motion.

^constructive criticism

[nowingdangel]

Thanks man, well, its not a spin off of Perversion of a Truth. I liked the random parenthesis, Im actually gonna do something like that with the title. THANK CHRIS w007!

[theuprisal]

You know I was just kiddin bro

I thought it was just funny spinoff...regardless, the song is quite good

Keep up the good work