Okay, so I can do a canon verification on everything at least (except for two details: Pascal is a chameleon, not a frog, and at the beginning of the application when Casper says that Rapunzel was trying to convince Gothel to let her see the lanterns again, she was actually trying to tell her about the strange man in her closet). However, I found this to be pretty choppily written. :\ If not for the fact that she's a Disney princess, I'd object to the way that Rapunzel is portrayed as perfect as well, but I'm not sure if there would be much else to add.
I'd like a dream rewrite though. It's just taking a scene straight out of the movie more or less, and that's lazy.
I've never liked when people used a scene straight from canon as the dream, but we've allowed it before, so I wouldn't feel comfortable asking for a dream rewrite simply on that basis.
I'd be fine telling her to rewrite it to give Rapunzel more about herself, since the dream is all she has starting out. We've done that before, too.
Have we allowed it when they basically cut it straight out and don't add anything else on? Whether we have or not, though, I just think it's a bad dream. It doesn't really tell her anything and seems to serve purely to let her know about her healing hair right off the bat.
I don't remember specifically what we did, but even if we've let straight-lifted dreams in before, it's still a straight-lifted scene that doesn't offer that much.
The dream is kind of crap. The personality could go deeper, but it's not inaccurate, just...not awesome.
She's awfully forthcoming about the nature of her magic hair, isn't she? I know she wouldn't remember the specific scary stories about the outside world, but I was still kind of O_o.
Late but in agreement about the dream. It's not so much that it's a cnon scene (as Scath says we have allowed that before). It's more that it's kinda.... bare.
REQUEST FOR DREAM RE-WRITE - DRAFTpompous_todayAugust 13 2011, 00:36:57 UTC
Hi, Casper!
After reviewing your application, we would like to request a re-written or expanded dream. While using scenes from canon is acceptable, we feel that the one you have provided gives Rapunzel too little to go on; remember, a character's dream is all they have upon arriving in Edensphere.
Please feel free to submit your rewritten dream and we will continue processing your application.
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I'd like a dream rewrite though. It's just taking a scene straight out of the movie more or less, and that's lazy.
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I'd be fine telling her to rewrite it to give Rapunzel more about herself, since the dream is all she has starting out. We've done that before, too.
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Voting dream rewrite/expansion.
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She's awfully forthcoming about the nature of her magic hair, isn't she? I know she wouldn't remember the specific scary stories about the outside world, but I was still kind of O_o.
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After reviewing your application, we would like to request a re-written or expanded dream. While using scenes from canon is acceptable, we feel that the one you have provided gives Rapunzel too little to go on; remember, a character's dream is all they have upon arriving in Edensphere.
Please feel free to submit your rewritten dream and we will continue processing your application.
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