fic : Better Days

[nullsys]

title 
Better Days

fandom 
The OC

summary 
A presumed dead Ryan returns home after a few months

timeline 
AU (season 1)

beta 
If it counts, MS Word 03

disclaimer 
Sadly "The OC" isn't mine, but belongs to others (Josh Schwarz, FOX, ...)

previous 
0 : The Worst Day |
1 : Realization |
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Comments

[fredsmith518]

no, not cheesy, nicely built tension
thank you for the quick update

[jassylou]

Thankyou for the quick update and thanks for taking some of my comments on board. You've written this really well Andrew and I can't wait for another quick update.
I love how you got just the right amount of shock in.Enabling Kirsten to pass out.When she comes round she'll soon be fussing around him and getting his hair back to normal.Oh dear I think there will be yet another visit to the Docs for a check up,and we all know how much Ryan dislikes those doctors.LOL
Mmmm I wonder who will be the next one to "bite the dust "?.LOL
Sandy maybe?.

Sorry I couldn't help with the title.:( For what it's worth,I'll keep thinking.("Envisage Our Son")
Good luck...update soon...Yeah?.

[nullsys]

Thanks! And making Kirsten collapse was just too well fitting as to not use it - Thanks for the input.

I wasn't able to translate your suggested title in something that makes sense for me. So you might want to explain to me what it means.

Meanwhile, what do you think of the following possibilities? (alphabetical order :))

1. Almost Lost
2. Beloved Son and Brother
3. Chino's Comeback
4. Comeback
5. Coming Home
6. Lost and Found
7. Return to a New Life
8. Return to Life
9. Ryan's Comeback

[jassylou]

I like your 5 and 8 but number 5 is definitely family connected so I prefer that one.

You don't need any help Dude because you're amazing.
The one I suggested Envisage means having a mental image of (a thing not yet existing) or imagine as desirable or possible. I can envisage that Kirsten will feel like that until she finds that he is really flesh and blood. Another I could suggest is a Life for a Home.I'm not very good at this. I'm sure a title will grab you soon. hugs.

[chrisear]

lol this was good... I am still a little bit confused on why he calls them mom and dad...I get that he was adopted, but it was still so fresh

[nullsys]

The last few lines of part 1 should explain that.
Ryan had nearly lost his family because of his insecurities, so he 'decided' that it's time to let them in the same way they did by first taking him in and then even adopting him.
In other words: While he talked to Luke he realized what he could have in life if he only accepted/allowed it.

Hope this makes sense. (If not you might as well request a german version of it, since you should be able to read it according to your profile)

[chrisear]

lol nice explanation... yeah I can read german as well... do u write everything in german first and than translate it? isnt that a lot of extra work?

also noch so eine computer-nacht-eule hier

[nullsys]

Nein, ist alles direkt in Englisch geschrieben. Übersetzen ist meiner Meinung nach weit aus schwieriger als gleich auf Englisch schreiben.
Aber es passiert leider öfters mal, dass ich nicht die passenden Worte find um was in Englisch zu formulieren, was in the Fics auf Grund des Kontext meistens egal, in Kommentaren und Erklärungen aber lästig ist.

[beachtree]

I don't have much time- or any, really- but thanks for the quick update. Since I'm going for the double here, the previous chapter, with Kirsten's reflections, doubts, and then having herself indulge in the feeling, even if it couldn't be real, was very poignant.

As for your titles, I like #5 or #8- or anything that stresses the whole "back to life/second chances (or even third chances from one POV)" for Ryan- and all of them.

Thanks!