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Third Time's a Charm

May 09, 2011 23:34

Title: Third Time's a Charm
Rating: K+
Fandom/Pairing: The Closer; Pope/Raydor
Word Count: 550
Author’s Note: This is my first Closer fic, so I’m new to writing these characters. Hopefully I didn’t screw up too bad. Unspecified setting, though you could imagine it somewhere after the end of season 6.
I want to note that I have a hard time accepting ( Read more... )

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Comments 12

hugamoose May 10 2011, 06:12:14 UTC

Great little story especially for your first one~ Great Job!!

nvgvup May 10 2011, 13:49:12 UTC

Thank you :)
I've been thinking about trying to do this for a while, and then last night I needed to procrastinate...and voila!

akachankami May 10 2011, 06:15:23 UTC

bahahahahahaha! XD gosh, all dialogue ficlet! and a lovely one!
i can hear brenda complaining in her funny accent and pope sitting at his desk explaining XD LOL at the ending!

i don't know if i see the pair on tv but fanfiction is making it kinda real =D hee

nvgvup May 10 2011, 13:52:29 UTC

ooh I'm so glad their voices and attitudes came across - that's what I'm really aiming for when I write. And all dialogue seems to be a thing for me this week, it's quite a challenge.

i don't know if i see the pair on tv but fanfiction is making it kinda real
Isn't this the truth! I don't really see it but I certainly enjoy reading it! Some writers on lj make it rather believable, so I'm willing to put aside my doubts and enjoy!

sczep84 May 10 2011, 07:12:19 UTC

LOVE this!! Had to giggle several times, what an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!!!

nvgvup May 10 2011, 13:56:32 UTC

giggles are fantastic! How can you not giggle when Brenda is all flustered and whiny and thinking the world revolves around her and Pope is just sitting there calmly rationalizing all her complaints away!

Thanks for the love!

lindy999 May 10 2011, 14:32:19 UTC

Very sweet. Great job!!!

luawalshie May 10 2011, 16:34:33 UTC

It's sooo cute, Thanks for a excellent job! ! *GIGGLES*

nvgvup May 10 2011, 16:44:30 UTC

Yea for giggles! Glad you enjoyed this

nvgvup May 10 2011, 16:45:08 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad the sweet came through - Pope may not always have been faithful, but he does care deeply about his women :)

littlelizzyann May 26 2011, 04:05:32 UTC

Oh, dear God. You have finally gone insane.

Good, good ear for their voices (except for Will's last speech--I'm a little mixed on that. It's really hard to keep in character for a "baring the soul" speech).

What in the world does this have to do with you Brenda?

*snorfle*

She’s totally not your type. She’s so, so difficult

*deeply ironic cackle* I adore the subtext about the fact that it is the ways in which Raydor is just like Brenda that make Raydor so appealing to him. Because you totally meant that subtext, right? Right?

nvgvup May 27 2011, 19:09:28 UTC

Yes, we should probably have my head examined...though it may be too late.

So this came out of the episode Lover's Leap in which Will is explaining his relationship with Maggie Scott to Brenda. He gives a somewhat similar "baring the soul" speech and it just got me thinking how similar his description of Maggie was to Brenda and then to how similar Sharon is to both of those women. So while the voice was definitely hard to maintain in that paragraph, I also think it rang true for me because I'd already heard him do something similar and Sharon is the epitome of what Will seems to look for.

And as for the subtext...absolutely intentional! As said above, I find lots of similarities between these three women (even though we don't actually meet Maggie). Will definitely has a type and while I still don't think Sharon would fall for him - I absolutely think he would fall for her. :)

Thanks for all your feedback!