trying not to sound too self-righteous

[nyarhotep]

no time recently to do much of anything outside of work (of course, i've overcome these time constraints by not sleeping - weee). lotsa early morning meetings. was able to hang with some good friends though, saw Smokin' Aces with two awesome ladies, Sun's Sis and Accountramatrix. it's really good, Piven was fricking AMAZING (as was everyone else

Comments

[somerled]

The problem is it's a bit grandiose. I've never seen you lean so heavily on adjectives as here. Maybe keep it simpler? Don't try to reach so far.

[nyarhotep]

hmm, i was trying to be precise. ¿what do you see as the overt adjectives?

[ursandovich]

It is always good to try to pin one's notions down yet know it should only be a snapshot of a evolving position. Detail: maybe you could add "continuing" before the word military actions in the last line since you don't reject the initial action, just the follow-up. Macro: your basic position is so general (though laudable) that it doesn't show that you grok the serious points of conflict that logic won't resolve. Folks won't negotiate in good faith (chuckle) when logic is not their main deal. Bow briefly to the hot buttons to respect reality.