Daisy of the Desert (thanks to Pan)

[nyc_poet]

Standing there
Silent
A fragile daisy struggling to hold onto the ground
I witness the sweep of your brown-eyed gaze
It lands on me
Silent
A butterfly fighting the wind to get to the daisy
I can't move
I can't breathe
Hoping this isn't just my reality playing before me
You smile
It's not as confident as before
Your eyes are slightly shifty
And you're silent (

Comments

[pan16]

Wonderful Sam. I especially like the lines,

"A fragile daisy struggling to hold onto the ground
I witness the sweep of your brown-eyed gaze
It lands on me
Silent
A butterfly fighting the wind to get to the daisy
I can't move
I can't breathe
Hoping this isn't just my reality playing before me"

and,

"I won't climb the stairs back to my front door (until I know you aren't coming back for me)
And the wind blows the butterfly away
And rips the daisy from the ground..."

May I suggest a title? Daisy of the Desert.
Anyway, I like this one a lot. I love poems that use daisies and butterflies. :)

[nyc_poet]

thank you...oo yes i love your suggestion and im running away with it...catch me if you can! *sticks out tongue and runs* ♥ ~Sam~

[pan16]

You're a sweetie. I'm glad you liked it. :)

[ayoub]

Very well written :)

[nyc_poet]

thanksssss ♥ ~Sam~