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Then There Were Two (7/8)

Dec 05, 2006 20:21

Title: Then There Were Two (7/8)
Author: Nytel
Rating: R
Pairing: John/Teyla
Main Characters: John, Teyla
Genre: Angst/Romance
Summary: The need to find some kind of comfort during a dire war is strong. It is important to build strong bonds with family and friends, but even that may backfire.
Warnings: Sex, Character Death
Spoilers: Up to Phantoms.
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john/teyla, ttwt, atlantis, atlantis fic, fan fic

Comments 13

anonymous December 6 2006, 09:24:29 UTC

OMG! What a chapter! I need to read the next chapter ASAP! I'm so happy it wasn't John that died...but having said that, I can't help but feel saddened by McKay and Ronan's deaths. You have done an amazing job with this story and that goes for all of your other work that I've read.
I'll be waiting patiently for the next installment!!!
Sarah-Jayne :)

nytel December 7 2006, 04:54:35 UTC

Wow, thanks. :D I'm working on the next chapter now, but I have finals starting in less than a week, so I'm not going to guarantee anything.

You have done an amazing job with this story and that goes for all of your other work that I've read.
--*blushes* Thank you so much.

carpenyx December 6 2006, 16:45:56 UTC

I think this all came together very nicely. It's a wonderful and heart wrenching chapter. I loved it.

I was sad about Rodney and Ronon. :(

“Kolya,” John spat out as he recognized the leader of the group.

I think using Kolya and the Genii brought in an element to make the deaths just so much for heart-breaking. It becomes more personal for Sheppard & Teyla, instead of it just being a inhabitant of a planet or something. So, I really loved that.

Purpose giving her strength, Teyla pushed herself upright in the bed before ripping the IV out of her arm. Carson stared at her, thoroughly shocked, and she was up and out of the bed before he managed to get a word out.

I loved this scene - just visually seeing Teyla's adrenaline kick-in and Carson looking on, like 'WTH?'

Teyla could not help but notice that despite their closeness John was keeping his distance-he was not touching her at all. It was as if he was afraid.

Sighs, this breaks my heart.

“I can’t love you.”

kills me.

He let the sentence hang unfinished between them, but he ( ... )

nytel December 7 2006, 04:58:07 UTC

I think this all came together very nicely. It's a wonderful and heart wrenching chapter. I loved it.
--Thank you. I'm so glad that it worked. *wipes sweat off brow*

I think using Kolya and the Genii brought in an element to make the deaths just so much for heart-breaking. It becomes more personal for Sheppard & Teyla, instead of it just being a inhabitant of a planet or something. So, I really loved that.
--I'd never really thought about it, but you're definitely right. I don't think it would have had the same effect had it been some random person.

I loved this scene - just visually seeing Teyla's adrenaline kick-in and Carson looking on, like 'WTH?'
--Lol. Poor Carson.

Sighs, this breaks my heart.
--*whimpers* I know.

Oooh, this is good.
--Thanks!

I actually hadn't been planning the end to be like that at all, but when the idea came to me I just had to write it.

Thanks for all the help and the feedback. *hugs*

carpenyx December 7 2006, 07:44:25 UTC

you're welcome :)

nath_42 December 6 2006, 21:58:12 UTC

Ok WHY do you have to kill characters !! and not one but two ! god !
Well written, lots of emotions... but still... WHY ??!! (lol)

nytel December 7 2006, 04:59:28 UTC

I'm horrible! Lol. This was actually originally going to be a one shot that was essentially just this chapter. I found the idea of Ronon and Rodney both dying to be intriguing (but not in a morbid sense!) Just because it meant that it would stir up a lot of things in John.

Thanks for reading. :D

nicole9514 December 6 2006, 23:34:31 UTC

Very well written hun, very very sad lol but i love the emotion in it. John being afraid to let her in, that's so him.

I love Rodney though...rodney isn't allowed to die lol

**hugs**

nytel December 7 2006, 05:00:27 UTC

Thanks. I was aiming for sad, so that's a good thing.

John being afraid to let her in, that's so him
--*sigh* Unfortunately.

I love Rodney too! It was so hard to write that scene. Eep!

Thanks for reading. :D

jeyla4ever December 7 2006, 05:05:37 UTC

oh, no...Ronon and McKay...? NOOOO!

I Loved it..in a sad kind of way....but John can't leave her.....!

Oh, that was BEAUTIFUL HON! Heartwrenching beautiful!

nytel December 7 2006, 05:27:43 UTC

Yep, Ronon and McKay. I thought people might actually figure it out before hand, but I don't think anyone did. I was thinking that the title, (Then There Were Two) and the character death warning would give it away. *shrugs*

I really like it too, but in that sad way. And John isn't leaving her. I wouldn't do that. :D

Thanks for the feedback.