Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 4

[o2binla]

Title: Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 4
Description: Canon AU beginning in 1983; Jack leaves TX instead of dying.  A short chapter to keep things moving... 
Warnings: MO!Jack and explicit non-J/E pairing, in this chapter.  Feel free to skip it if you hate that. 
Comments: Much appreciated. 
Disclaimer: Not my characters, and certainly not making any

Comments

[ramona4jake]

I like where you go with your story, I really do ! I so much wish Jack be able to forget Ennis and make a life for himself, one that HE likes, and with somebody who loves him.... I wonder if that is possible or would that be a sin to even think so ?!!
Anyway, thank you for this, hope yo up-date soon !

[o2binla]

I'm not sure Jack can ever forget Ennis, but he could use a break (me too). Not from Ennis, but from how miserable things have become. I'm glad you're liking it!

[chapeaugris]

"Fuck it, Jack thought, I just can't think anymore about Ennis right now."

Hey, tell me about it, Jack. Wish I could quit thinking about you as well. LOL

This feels like such a necessary stage for Jack, midway between Mexico and Wyoming in so many ways.

That detail about the men supplying their own sheets cracked me up. I think only a woman would have thought to add that. Very interested to see where this goes.

[o2binla]

LOL! I hadn't thought of that, re the sheets, but maybe you're right... I figured Tom, while willing to host, would not want to be mopping up after people, yuck. And his friends appreciate it. You are right, Jack is in limbo and trying to make the best of it, or at least others are trying to make it better for him. Thanks for reading!

[elena_62]

I keep liking it. Your Jack is very believable.

But I suddenly started to worry about the title: in fact it doesn't look very hopeful... Any clues were are you taking us?

Thank you for writing!

Antonella

[o2binla]

Hi Antonella,
Thanks, I'm glad you like my story! I'm not too happy w/my title, as it suited the opening chapters but this part not so much. I'm thinking about altering it as its overly dark. Without giving too much away, I want to write about Jack's life in the wake of his heartbreak over Ennis, which has nearly killed him. I do have most of the entire story in mind already. While it deals w/painful things, I'll say that nothing truly horrible happens to Jack or Ennis in my story -- well, except for those people who believe Jack getting w/another man is the worst possible thing...

[elena_62]

Thank you for replying!

*nothing truly horrible happens to Jack or Ennis in my story*

That's exactly what I wanted to know. I can keep reading ;-)

In fact I would have kept reading anyway, probably, because I like your writing. I would have just reserved the reading for moments when I feel particularly strong...

Ciao

A

[o2binla]

While I want to write something realistic, to the extent I'm able, I don't have anything planned that's anywhere near as wrenching as canon. :-)

[samtyr]

I find Jack totally believable in this setting. Thank you for sharing this.

[o2binla]

Glad you're liking it! I'm hoping it sounds realistic, even though I'm making it up.

[bbm_lover]

I get that Jack is trying to forget Ennis and start a life where he is loved for who he is, but I'm a J/E die-hard gal and I'm wondering where this tale is going. Your note said that this is an explicit non-J/E pairing in this chap, but does that mean the boys will come together in the later chapters. Just wanted to know. Having said that I love how you write and how you delved into Jack's thoughts and the other men mentioned here. I'll continue to read. Thanks for sharing ozbinla.
Jess

[o2binla]

Thank you for sticking with it, as I know MO stories can be tough. There are so many stories out there already and I wanted to write one that takes a different direction. Assuredly Jack had other men after him -- what if one actually got somewhere w/him? Meanwhile, Ennis is still very much on Jack's mind, but unfortunately he is "caught in his own loop" up in WY for now...