Jack had to admit it was hot, the suddenness of standing there and watching his dick disappear into Tyler’s mouth and throat - not all the way, but close enough. He figured Tyler was trying to get him going, and appreciated the effort. Didn't hurt that he was more stoned than he'd realized, and the sight of Tyler’s greyhound body spread out below
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Reading this chapter pretty much feels lquite ike watching the Randall scene in the movie. Very well-written! Can hardly wait for the next chapter.
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I am glad that Tyler seems to be good to Jack. It's still hard to see Jack with someone else. Why is Ennis so darned hard headed stubborn?!
This was an interesting chapter. I do love the way you write your characters. I'm looking forward to your next chapter. : )
Debra
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I liked your use of the Grateful Dead. I can picture exactly what Steve looks like. lol It underlined the generational and cultural gulf between Jack and the two guys, plus it lent a streak of darkness, reminding us of Jack's original fate.
I sure wish you were able to update more frequently because this is one of my favorite stories.
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I'd love to update more frequently, as the story is much on my mind -- I'm determined to overcome my writing phobia and just keep pressing on -- but RL sometimes gets in the way, esp. w/this last chapter. I've started ch. 7 and hope to have it up sooner than it took last time... Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Thank you for the great update! I really like how you write. I think you do a great job depicting Jack's feelings and the presence of Ennis in his thoughts.
I'm so glad of the climate change in the fandom, that is that you are not getting lyinched because you are stepping out of the one true pairing.
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Antonella
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Glad you're enjoying it! I don't believe Jack would ever just forget Ennis, so Ennis is definitely on his mind even as he tries to cope w/how hollowed-out their long affair has left him feeling.
I wanted to write this story b/c I don't think it's been done, and also b/c Jack gets killed or seriously injured in so many stories but never gets his bell rung by a hot guy as he well deserves (in my opinion anyway :-). I was concerned that some readers would be hurt or just hate it, but that hasn't been the case -- I think you're right, some people in the fandom are ready for something different.
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But today I thought I give your story a try and because it is so very well written and believable I had to also read all the other chapters.
Perhaps Jack will find a little happiness of his own, he surely deserves it.
Can't say much about Ennis in your story, we don't know what he's thinking and feeling. But I hope we will get a chapter about him too. Perhaps he can push himself a little and they can find each other again, although I don't have much hope because he's as withdrawn as ever. But maybe the long separation and slow retreat of Jack will give him time to think.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter
Paula
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