Office Fic: Free Break

Feb 21, 2007 09:37

Title: Free Break
Characters: Jim, Karen, Andy (hints of Jim/Karen)
Word Count: 1,500
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: none, assuming you've seen the third season
Author's Notes: Improv!fic, where the rules are as follows: someone gives the author five elements to base a story on, and two hours to write it. Elements are listed at the end of the story. ( Read more... )

fic, jim/karen, the office, improv

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If you've never heard the Abba Medley by Starsound, you must greenfish February 21 2007, 19:42:50 UTC
I have to say, it's refreshing and pleasing to read a Stamford story (something we don't see a lot of). I'm also really, really impressed with how much you got Andy. His dialogue, actions, everything - was spot-on. You also managed to pick up on a still-weary Jim and a playful Karen. Very nice!

I don't know why, but THIS was my favorite line of the story: "Never get those outside Buffalo, my friend," Andy says. "Stick with the original."

That just sealed it for me. That is Andy, to a "T." Nice work!!

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Re: If you've never heard the Abba Medley by Starsound, you must obsession_inc February 21 2007, 20:23:12 UTC
I haven't heard it, and now I must, indeed.

I don't know why, but THIS was my favorite line of the story

I don't know why, either, but I'm glad you liked it because that one started off as something else entirely and just... MORPHED. Oh, ANDY.

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allibabab February 21 2007, 20:18:16 UTC
I seriously can't believe you managed to create THIS from that prompt. I would have seen that combination and been like, "Um, no thanks," but you actually made something that makes sense and is hilarious and oh, Andy, Andy, Andy.

Awesome dialogue and characterizations! Everyone sounded just like themselves. All the different elements were seamlessly included, which is basically hugely impressive.

My favorite line: They left Andy face-down on the table, quietly singing "Dancing Queen" along with the jukebox, and Karen racked up a game of pool while Jim watched. Oh, ANDY. Hilarious! That is so him.

Awesome job. This is brilliant.

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obsession_inc February 21 2007, 20:29:41 UTC
but you actually made something that makes sense

Seriously, that's the part that surprised me. I was just like "an anthropology video about China? WTF??" and losing my mind for a while there, but then it all worked out. The more I've been putting these prompts together for other people, the more it feels like maybe this is how they write the actual show, sometimes. "Jim, Karen, and Andy, a squeaky chair and a one-hit wonder from the 90's, GO!"

Awesome dialogue and characterizations! Everyone sounded just like themselves. All the different elements were seamlessly included, which is basically hugely impressive.

The best praise a girl could get. ::blows kisses:: Thankyoooou!

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fiorie February 21 2007, 21:47:47 UTC
"Nah, I've got one of my own." She looks at it critically. "How much memory do you have on this thing? Sixty gig?"

"Thirty."

"Pff. Mine's bigger." She grins, flashing a look at him through her eyelashes.

"Wow. Karen Fillapelli with the penis size reference." Jim shakes his head. "I am learning so much tonight."

This made me laugh SO hard. Like I said, the whole thing is genius. The characterizations were amazing, Andy was perfect, Karen and Jim were sweet, and it was all brilliant.

I loved this line: Instead, Jim is at the bar with Andy, the wind-up doll who walks like a man, and Karen, who he's pretty sure still doesn't like him.

Ah, Stamford Jim.

The best part of all of it is that you can totally tell that you had a good time writing it. It's that kind of story. Awesome!

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obsession_inc February 22 2007, 02:51:30 UTC
Yay, thank you!

The thing with Jim's iPod and comparing sizes was originally intended for Andy, but by the time I got to that part of the story it occurred to me that Karen would totally do that, too, so BOOM.

I totally had a great time. The best thing, though, is now everyone else is doing it, too, so I get to read everyone's new stories while I rest up for my next round!

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anonymous February 22 2007, 00:30:23 UTC
Brilliant! I think you have just written THE scene I've always wanted to see. Karen and Jim flirting, drunk Andy, and just... it's all so good, especially your Andy voice. And this: "the wind-up doll who walks like a man" made me laugh and will continue to do so every time I see Andy on the show in the future. I really hope they market a singing Andy wind-up doll soon. He has so many greatest hits.
-Paper Jam

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obsession_inc February 22 2007, 02:53:06 UTC
Wheee, thank you! I'm glad to see the wind-up doll line getting some love, because I wasn't sure about it. I would, however, TOTALLY buy a singing Andy wind-up doll. He walks! He sings! He does the grapevine! JAZZ HANDS!

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sophia_helix February 22 2007, 01:39:57 UTC
This is super-awesome -- I love the way you've sketched Jim in the early Stamford days, fitting in 'cause that's what Jim does, but still not really at home. And in two hours, too! Oh, improv fics. *wipes away nostalgic tear*

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obsession_inc February 22 2007, 02:57:23 UTC
I know, it's so totally turn-of-the-millennium XF, isn't it? All of us so young and innocent, like little pop-tarts straight out of the toaster. ::happy sigh:: Yup, yup, those were the days. (Now, where's my cane? Hey, you kids, GET OFF MY LAWN!)

And, oh, right, glad you liked it! :cuddle:

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