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[of_bad_faith]

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[fidrich]

*grins* Wow. I really like this. I think you got me right away with the Chigago quote, heh. The POV changes work and the whole thing is just... hm, I suppose you can tell I'm not a particularly constructive reviewer. But I did like it.

Just wondering, what exactly did Pansy have to do for her initiation? I'm guessing it has something to do with Avada Kedavra - but what?

[of_bad_faith]

Thank you.

This is in desperate need of editing. A school project came up so I had trouble finding time to work on this. I ended up doing a very late, rush job on it, so if you'd like, I'll write you something better.

[ragna_the_urple]

Again, like everything else of yours that we read, we loves it.

You rock so much

[of_bad_faith]

Aw, thanks! :)

[ragna_the_urple]

Keep writing, or I will lose my faith in humanity

[of_bad_faith]

Will do. :)

[starrysummer]

Squee, deatheater!Pansy. I really like the characterization and story here, but there's a few parts where I'd want some more detail. The POV changes work, but it's a bit unclear who's saying the last line. The change between Blaise and Draco is very interesting-- it's as if they're sitting next to each other, speaking to an interviewer. There's a sort of energy to that that doesn't quite carry through the rest of the story. I also agree about wanting a bit more detail to the initiation. You don't need to spell out what's going on, but something more than just avada kedavra would make the event more powerful

[of_bad_faith]

Okay. I was kind of running close to late on this, so the end was a rush job. A school project came up and I was stuck doing that for the past week, so this turned out as a "15 minute ficlet". I'll definitely go back and edit it.

[ex_theatrica309]

Maybe I'm just a bit slow, but I had to read over Draco's section twice before I realized who the speaker was. *sheepish grin* I think that was only me, though...

I agree that you should go back and edit, especially the initiation, which was, to say the least, hella confusing. XD (But I know you were pressed for time, and it would've been a trillion times better had you not had a deadline.)

I love the first and last Pansy-definition parts. It's kind of silly, but bits at the beginning and end of stories that tie the whole thing together? They get me every time. *g* And the last line made me jealous--it was nicely worded, summed up Pansy well, and ended the fic with a sort of quiet, lurking tone...

Lovely, as always. <3

[of_bad_faith]

I'll definitely add the initiation sometime soon. :D

Thank you! <3

[ronniekinns]

Oh, very nicely done. I like the beginning and ending parts the best -- the incorporation of the flower pansy's meaning was nice. I liked the other's opnions of Pansy too. The POV changes were a bit confusing though, and I think more could be added to it (I'm glad you are). But overall, I thought it was very good.

[of_bad_faith]

Thank you. And yes, the ending was very rushed. As soon as I can, I'll change it. It was 11 PM and I had an hour to do both and the other got most of my energy. I'm glad you liked it. :)