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[oh_mumble]

Title: Everyone's A Story Of Their Own
Author: Lis
Part: 1/1
Rating: PG
Pairing: PoynterJudd
Summary: Take the time to make some sense//Of what you want to say//And cast your words away upon the waves
A/N: Originally written for laderinmytights for the mcsecretsanta fic exchange. ♥ With huge thanks for zoemargaret for the beta!
Disclaimer: Real people, fake story.

Comments

[flithymind]

It was a really clever way of writing a fic, so thumbs up for that!
In the beginning it took me a while to work out what exactly was going on but when I did get into it, it was really striking and different.
I would say though that some of the sentences are a bit long at times.

V. good though.

[oh_mumble]

Thank you, babes! :)

What about the beginning was confusing? Do I need to lengthen the explanation of what they're doing? I don't want to put off the reader in the first paragraph, ha!

Mmmm, I do tend to have run-on sentances. I need to keep an eye on that, thank you! And thank you for the cc, it's very much appreciated! ♥

[flithymind]

No problem!

It was confusing because the beginning was kind of different to how it ended, I seriously thought it was poynterjones for at least half the story! A longer explanation like you say would be great!

♥

[oh_mumble]

:D

Wait, so not the narrative, but because of the ending pairing? Oh, I see! ::thinks:: I need to work on this...

Thankee, babes! ♥

[oh_mumble]

Hee! Aw, thank you :) Comments like this also much appreciated, because now I can go sleep and be happy ♥

[oh_mumble]

::smishes you:: Chi, you never fail to make me kicky-feet in cheer :) Huh, you know, I never looked at it as a fatherly relationship because I always see Tom as the dad of the group, but, yeah. I think I've done that without realising. ::headtilt::

[kirstini]

That was very good! Except I didn't like how it was PoynterJudd haha. I would have preferred PoynterJones but that would have been to obvious and boring and predictable. Lol. It was gooooood :]

[oh_mumble]

See, I think my brain may be wonked because I just can't see anything in PoynterJones apart from them being total BFF. And, yeah, I wanted to stay away from the obvious formula :)

Thank you! ♥

[jess_darkwater]

You'll be proud of me! I actually embraced the fact that this was PoynterJudd!!

I think it works wonderfully the way the story is told and how Danny and Dougie's relationship with each other is presented. Also, the contrast between them and Harry and Dougie is significant in the mood as well.

God, you can tell I've just finished doing English homework. I think I analysed it a little too much =]

♥

[oh_mumble]

I am! I am very proud of you! I award you a glittery medal of honour, bebe! ;)

Hee! Damn that English homework, making you analyse slash.

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