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[oh_sweet_sanity]

This is a poem I had to write for my poetry class...I'm really not creative or talented when it comes to writing, sooo this is my poor attempt at something semi-decent.

This blissful state of unconciousness

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[k8t3]

believe me its good compared to any poem i would think up...
yea that didnt come accross to me as i was reading it..
but now that you say was its about...
i can see that!
haha its good :)
<3 katie

[oh_sweet_sanity]

Thanks:)

Yeah I feel like such a dumb retard compared to the other kids in my class, like they write like seriously things that amaze me and then here comes little ol' me with this shit haha.

[imamesstobemade]

And as these tears stream down my face like a river to my mouth
I’ll think of you with my open heart that you slowly broke
And as I’m moving through my empty world
I’ll remember that IT never even crossed your mind
And when I listen to this song
I’ll know that you’ve never heard it
And these unconscious thoughts although I know I’m thinking
Will get me over you slowly, but surely
And you will never know that I think of you, or I remember you, or I KNOW you…
You’ll kiss her and I’ll wish it was me.

there's my attempt at a poem

yours is way better
haaha

[oh_sweet_sanity]

No I definately like and can relate to it!

[imamesstobemade]

i wish i couldnt relate to it.
i didnt even edit that..
it just rolled off the tip of my fingers i guess lol

[oh_sweet_sanity]

See you're lucky, I sit and sit and sit and it takes me forever to come up with the littlest thing, it sucks.