LJ Idol Week Four - Woken Up Like An Animal, Teeth Ready for Sinking.

Apr 06, 2014 09:09

It's too hot in the sauna, I need to get outside, need a moment alone. It's one of those ethereally misty afternoons where the fog hangs over the lake and the pine trees drip with moisture. It's quiet at the Lodge at beginning of April, students won't be showing up for another week or so and for now there are only the few staff members who are ( Read more... )

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bleodswean April 6 2014, 16:18:41 UTC
This is wonderful. Full of action...and yet nothing really happens OUTSIDE of the speaker. Very, very nice!

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ohelectricshock April 10 2014, 15:11:59 UTC
Thank you! :) I wanted it to be a moment of quiet reflection but also an important memory.

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roina_arwen April 6 2014, 16:55:28 UTC
Love the descriptions in this, and the feeling of hope at the end. Well done!

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ohelectricshock April 10 2014, 15:12:09 UTC
Thanks so much!

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i_will_not_say April 6 2014, 17:53:22 UTC
I liked the note of hopefulness at the end of the story, and you had good descriptions in this piece. :)

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ohelectricshock April 10 2014, 15:12:29 UTC
Thank you! I am glad that my descriptions worked out the way I hoped they would :)

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ohelectricshock April 10 2014, 15:12:39 UTC
Sure was :)

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mallorys_camera April 6 2014, 19:46:24 UTC
Good writing. I can visualize the scene exactly, and of course I want to know all about what happened on that date. :-)

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ohelectricshock April 10 2014, 15:13:16 UTC
Hehehehe :) Also thank you! Description was something I tried to focus on and I'm glad that it came through.

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